All Comments on 'In The Heat of The Day'

by battleaxe_babe

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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Praise

I loved it!!

StephanieSimpkinsStephanieSimpkinsover 12 years ago
Mmm...

Yummy! Turned me on! Which isn't hard to do, lol, but this was really good! I enjoyed it! I'd love to read something about maybe the mother-in-law seeing her and getting off on the image? That'd be so awesome.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Needs more orgasm

Very nice, very erotic story. I loved the descriptions and could almost see you in the darkened Mediterranean room. The only criticism that I have is that your orgasm did not have the same detail as the rest of the story. A little more buildup followed by more details of the orgasm followed by the post-orgasmic bliss would make this a 5-star story.

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