That's it. That's all I can say. I'm... speechless... This story is amazing, and very well written. I can't wait to read more on this. 5 Stars.
hurry hurry hurry post more pleeeaassseeee!!!!!
Fantastic, hope we don't have to wait to long.
But... you stopped arrggghhh hurry what happens next
Exactly right! This is what paranormal fiction is supposed to b like.5 stars, no question about it...Pls continue.eagerly awaiting d next post...
Oh wow, oh wow! Boy, you sure packed one helluva punch in that! Very, very interested in this and can't wait for more. Wow.
Lol I'm currently reading Ellis and Dav's story and to find you are now on Lit is AMAZING! I liked Velaku's story so I'll follow it here. You are amazing! Lol this is the only place i can actually give you feed back coz i'm not a full member of G.A :(
you have drawn me into your world, now i can't wait to continue finding out more. I have a zillion questions that i am sure will be answered as you reveal more layers. good read, thank you for the post, so far so good.
It will be interesting to see how Velaku's youth and inexperience play out as he carries through on his revenge. There's a lot more to be discovered about your world and characters! :)
I LOVE SO MUCH WILL THERE BE MORE OF IT
Awesome beginning I can't wait for more AMAZING!!!!
Yikes you have my full attention. Please post soon and longer. I need to know what happens next. What a way to begin a story!!!!
iam fully hooked....MORE!!!!!
I was right; readers over here are great. So wow, thanks for all the wonderful comments! Let me see if I can give a few answers to the questions. This is a complete novella length story and will post every few days (already submitted Ch. 2). When it's done I also have a 2nd Carthera story(novel length)done and a third that is partly written. So... lots of content to come from me. The chapters will remain short but I hope the guaranteed fast posting schedule will help appease readers.
Again, thanks so much for all the great comments and feedback! I hope everyone continues to enjoy Velaku's story.
This first chapter reached out and grabbed me. I couldn't stop reading even if I wanted to. I am most definitely intrigued to read more.
Right between the eyes, right from the start! I generally like longer chapters, but it sounds like you will give it to us fast and hard. Fast and hard is good too. lol Keep up the good work.
Ok, tell me more, tell me more :)
Just what I needed to brighten my Friday. So glad you have plans to make this story last.
Started off with a bang, now you have to keep the momentum. Great start, good luck.
adrenalin's gots my hearts pumping like a freight train. thankgoodness chapter 2 is already posted.
onwards and upwards ;0)
Off to read the rest now. Anticipation fully engaged!!
Can't take time to write much. Must continue reading. Love it!
Hmmm lucky chapter 2 is already posted or I would have gone crazy from the anticipation! Onward I read!
estoy con el que escribio antes si el proximo capitulo no hubiese salido ya me estubiera muriendo ..... como sea me gusta y estoy segura que voy a seguir leyendo bye XD
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