"Brings me to the edge"
beautifully written. love the composition and the way you played with the words. good job keep it up.
Very nice poem. The build up was what moved me
Great poem, reminds me of a fantasy I have long thought about. Thanks for sharing it with us!
knowing for a fact this is the fist poem the woman has written in forty years, coupled with the nice near-rhyme of the last verses of each "stanza", a "4" for having attempted a poem at all after so many years eased overly easily into a "5" for the near-rhymes. unless this is "beginner's luck", the author shows potential.
The poem describes seduction at it's finest.
Oh I would make you wait and wait. and beg for more... over and over to.. very nice.. like it too.. the sub side of you is very intrigueing.. love a switch though..
tongue drawing circles,
triggering waves of sensation to your core.
Till two bodies melts.
...is just the beginning!
I long to tease and be teased. To push and to be pushed to the point where you must have more. Driven by desire alone.
Mistress, Would I be allowed to tease you?
your work is amazing
While I do like the visual of lips on your legs, I don't know if I liked this. It just seemed to end to abruptly for me. But that's just my preference.
Teasing me... brings me to the edge......
I'd love to be able to provide this kind of pleasure to you. That's part of who I am, what I feel.
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