I don't know what happened the story for me has gone down hill quickly. I'm not saying its a bad story its just not interesting to me anymore. Manni is just horrible and there doesn't seem to be any chemistry. Again I'm not saying your writing is poor or anything of that nature; maybe another story of yours will catch my interest but this one is a miss for me. So I will not vote, and I wish you best of luck on future stories.
I'm sorry but Manny is so selfish, he cheated on her, but that's no reason to keep his child from him, she even said herself if they hadn't run into each other she would never have told him, how is that not being selfish and vindictive? It's not fair on their daughter either, just the thought that she would use their daughter that way or put her in the middle just makes me cringe. It's always been about her, what Manny wants, how Manny feels, doesn't seem to me like she has taken her daughter into consideration at all. Manny is just not a likeable character. Like the other comment, you're writing is good but this has just gone downhill. I will keep an eye out for other stories you write, but I won't read anymore of this.
Catching him with another woman was bad, but for it to have happened on the same day she found out she was pregnant is seriously fucked up. If that was me, I woulda went Lorena Bobbitt on his triflin' ass.
I find him pushy and arrogant. Who cares if he's fine, she has absolutely no reason to trust him or even like him for that matter. Like she said, she doesn't know him any more.
Ok so she had 3 years to do the right thing and tell him about Star, but then again, maybe she just wanted to move on from that part of her life, leave the pain behind and concentrate on making a life with her child.
And yes, I'm a single mom. And the father knows.
She tried to find him to inform him that she was pregnant isn't that enough. Should Manny had chased him all over looking form him. He should have tried to talk to her once everything calmed down any way. He was selfish as well.
and get off the motherfucking gas! Nothing, not even cheating (because he did even if he didn't get it in), justifies Manni keeping Star away from Scott for that damn long. I don't give a hot damn if he had actually gone through with fucking his secretary, he still deserves a right to his kid. Tried to find him my ass, she should have tried harder. He lost out on 3 years of her life, 3 years he will never get back, he has a right to be pissed. What if he were to die next year or even before he ever met Star? He wouldn't have ever known about her, neither would his family. That's so fucked up it aint even funny. If the roles were reversed, if anyone of you thinking he should get over it, were in his shoes you'd be the first one yelling 'fuck all that noise.' Don't give me that bullshit about Scott is this, Scott is that, he should get over it blah blah blah because he has every right to be upset, period.
However, with saying all that, I can still see Manni's side of things. I won't lie and say my ass wouldn't have been stomping the yard with Scott's face if I almost caught him cheating on me, especially if I were pregnant. He IS completely wrong for what he did whether it was an almost or an actual follow through. Let's just say I would have not been in a forgiving mood if I found my man between anyone's thighs other than my own (less we trying out some freaky shit together, then that'd be hot LOL).
My overall point: both parties are at fault here, no point in taking sides. Manni and Scott fucked up, the question now is: what are they going to do about the situation they are in? Are they going to shit or get off the pot? Be together and raise Star OR have joint-custody and raise Star? I say joint-custody because I don't know if I can trust Manni not to get mad at Scott again, for whatever reason, and take his child away. I think joint-custody protects some fathers from vindictive mothers who use their children as leverage, not that I'm saying Manni is that way but there are a lot of women that are.
One more thing... I can't agree that this ship doesn't have chemistry because they have it in spades, even when they're arguing. I felt like they were even passionate when they were having it out. They're one of those ships that could be arguing one minute and ripping each other's clothes off the next. It's pretty obvious that these two, though still somewhat at odds at the moment, have got a special connection. Anyway, thanks for writing and sharing I'm looking forward to the next installment. -Mel
why for once critisise the woman ? he did not really change at all. he plays indignant guy and again pushes her against the wall. he walks in ( 3 year old girl) and just says no I bring her to bed if you like it or not. the only thing I would do is sue him for child money but for sure not having him around that asshole.
I wouldn't have not told him. I still don't feel like she was I. The wrong. Because she tried to look for Him. I know she didn't try hard enough but it's still more he did. Yeah he didn't know he was pregnant but if he wanted to be a Jack ass and not talk to her after he cheated on her then she could be a Jackass and not tell him she's pregnant. Just pike she had to walk in and find out he was cheating on her , he had to come back into her life to find out he has a child. I feel as though if somebody I knew back stabbed me then I some how found out that something was going to happen to her, like somebody was going to jump her after school, I wouldn't warn her because she betrayed me. But I personally would have old him, yet I do see reasoning in her actions
Manni is a bitch "I tried to get in contact with you". What a load of shit no nightpleasure she wasn't supposed to travel the country looking for him but she could have easily gone to his mothers house but apparently that was too difficult. What a bitch.
this story has people all riled up. The previous comments are nearly as entertaining to read as the story itself, though it does seem like more people are inclined to place the blame squarely on the character they believe is in the wrong rather than acknowledging both parties involvement in the issue.
The other thing I wanted to address was the subject of cheating. Now regardless of Scott not actually having sex with his secretary, his involvement with her in any form other than professional was a betrayal of not only Manni but also himself. I'm not saying that he deserved being uninformed of his daughters existence because of this, but the blame should not rest solely on Manni's shoulders. In my opinion Scott also had 3 years to grow some balls and search for Manni, possibly to gain forgiveness for his misdeed or gain closure for himself. But until the next update, we can only speculate about their past, and also how the consequences of their choices will play on their future.
ps. I wouldn't worry to much about those who find this subject matter so distasteful that they have decided to forego reading the rest of this story. As you can see by the number and tone of previous comments, you have written something that has caught peoples attention. Kudos Cassandra
While I can understand Scott being upset, I feel he really doesn't get to be mad about her withholding her pregnancy from him. He should have thought about the possible child he could have been creating while he was cheating on her. I don't blame Manni for feeling the way she does. He was an irresponsible prick that couldn't be trusted or relied upon and now he has to deal with the consequences. Better for Star to grow up with only her mother than with an asshole father.
I'm grateful for and amazed by all of the comments and the responses. I didn't know that when I wrote this story that this would be such a controversial issue. (Of course, I knew it would get people riled, but hot damn, I think if you guys saw me in person that you'd probably stone me to death)! However, I'm feeling a great source of pride knowing that my writing is evoking such raw emotions and I thank you all for the encouragement and the comments. I like that you are all so honest about everything. I'll keep the chapters coming.
that they have decided to work it out with out the courts getting involved this time. Lets' see where this goes from here with them, I hope that they can get back to a level of love and respect for one another and eventually marriage-everyone deserves a 2nd chance!
A survivor type woman in America makes her own way for body, soul, and children when circumstances dictate the need. Scott violated a trust and pregnancy notwithstanding; the WOMAN had to go on. A man loses privileges when he FUCKS UP, i.e. in your face infidelity....ok?
Paternity has been traditionally assumed to be a right when it should be perceived as a privilege. Men should assume this attitude most of the time. The real deal is
she who carries makes the decisions and that needs to be RESPECTED. All things are NOT equal and that also needs to be understood.
Let's be clear.
my personal opinion ....everything happened too quickly. if i ran into an ex that told me sum bullshit when we broke it off i aint inviting in into my house and around my child nu uh then kissing the same day ... yeah i cant read this
In spite of his mistake I still think she got off kind of way but then again he missed his daughter's first few years of life.so I can see why he ebbed his ire at least for now
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