All Comments on 'The Busty Babysitter'

Sethp! That was one of the fucking hottest stories ever! Loved it! You rock!

I have never, ever found a story that was PERFECT,

but that is the only way to describe this story!!!

Absolutely fucking great

Liked the story a lot...was really hot! One suggestion though, from a technical perspective. You seem to have a thing where certain phrases "repeat" throughout. For instance, early on, one phrase was "he was resigned to his fate". You say that several times at different points. There were a few other phrases that repeated in similar fashion. Just be mindful of that.

But, overall, great job!

please write more!

Well done.

Look forward to the next.

Fun read though . That husband is such a puppet ! Well we get the love & the government we deserve . Hope his 18 yr old trophy puppet mistress treats him sweet for awhile. Thx to author for reality break .

i wish john was my husband

One of your best efforts, seth, I really loved it! Keep up with the fantastic story-telling; you get better and better!

This was a great story. The pacing and atmosphere had you feeling like you were experiencing life as John. Even guys who just let life happen to them deserve to have one or two fantasies come true. Unlike a previous commenter I think one of the best parts was the believability. Once you accept that this is the one in X million guy whose babysitter actually falls for him, each of the characters behaves in a realistic and human way, even to the point of me wanting to warn John about that dominating streak in his new lover.

Great job, sethp.

great story, too bad that it didn't get to titfuck the busty baby sitter; maybe next time

i hope there is a part 2 and the sister joins in

I liked your story very much. You could have had Rachel explain herself to John a bit more (IE: emotions, motivation, etc) and the ending felt very rushed. Still a very, very good story.

Great story. Needs more sex

Love the focus on sexual stuff beyond penetration. Always too much of that on this site. A fun and sexy - if a little simplistic - story.

As much as I love a nasty fuck story sometimes you need a happy ending... I thought your story was perfect.. . I loved it.

Amazing story, just beautifull

Really enjoyed the story, but the last paragraph was a rushed, overly simplistic ending. Very good otherwise.

to find out that the wife was not there becasue she was fucking her lover. hot story - prefer not to have bubby a cheating piece of shit, but it was still hot as wife did not care. i agree the ending was a bit rushed - but you get a 5 anyway.

It really was a great story, I agree with others that the ending seemed a little short and rushed.

My biggest complaint though was with huge tits like hers, how could you not include at -least- one hot tit fuck session?! I kept hoping it would come up but it never did.

the most imprtant thing that they forgot to put was the video.

And kick that old cold dead bitch out and fuck that young tight warm pussy, YEAH BABY,right fuckin on,ya need a nother story to continue. John knocking up that young big jugged tight pussy little girl,blowing his baby batter so far into her tight snug puss she gets knocked and produces so much milk for John and the new baby

I liked it! Luvely :))

What a great fantasy! Loved this story and will dream of my own Rachel. Although my kids are a little old for a babysitter maybe I will substitute housekeeper for babysitter for my phase of life! 😊

May be this short sweet story is an eye opener for me. Time will tell.

I really enjoyed this story. I liked how you built up to the sex, and there was more than just a page or two. My only complaint was the ending seemed a little rushed. Other than that I loved it!

The last line ! Lol

Seems like you got bored at the end and tired of writing... "John and his Busty little baby sitter made babies and lived happily ever after."

all the talk about breasts, etc.,

I'm not being sexist--just that having breast-fed (there! that'll turn any guy off!)--

I have reactions to reading about breasts reacting--I've been programed by my (former) baby (see? not "hot" stuff--haha--but true)--

I mean that with breast-feeding for at least a year, one's breasts just react to sounds, smells, all kinds of things--

and they remember

("large" could, for example, make one's small breasts feel--curiously--something)

nothing like a good romantic story-nice people-nice guys finish first-well written thanks

That story was the great works of any writer. The entire story was a perfect read and I loved it. 5 * easily.

You certainly had all the sexy action written so well - each scene was so well done!

Any chance of a sequel? This was pure pleasure! Maybe Wendy could be involved. lol

Thank you

Just wondering when somebody introduced you to my ex-wife lol. The only difference is no 18-yo babysitter and I kept the house.

This needs a sequel. Busty Babysitter: Townhouse Dreams!

The story was erotic with shades of maturity, finesse, and professionalism entwined into a beautiful story. This is so realistic that one might firmly believe that this is just a reproduction of some personal events. I don't know the author but I would like to read several sequels or other chapters. What interests me would be what happens when the wife realizes that the babysitter is her replacement? Do the babysitter's parents have a volcanic uproar when they find out? What feelings are expressed when the ex-wife drops the children off and smells the home filled with laughter, aromas of baking and roast, and happiness? I liked this story - my favorite.

Thanks for all the positive Feedback, everyone! I really appreciate it.

I was wondering if I could ask a favor. Could everyone who really likes this story try the girl with the Silver Trombone and The Pastor's Halloween Confusion? And comment either there or lit feedback to me. I want to know if this one is that much better than the other two, or if you guys haven't read those two because they have bad titles. lol

Thanks!

Sethp

Very good story, well thought-out, very good writing!

Albeit, you might need to look for another editor, to do your final proofing, whom doesn't use spell check, because there were lots of single words in sentences, not there, that should've been! Some words with only one or two letters and the rest of the word not there, (all were simply spell check, trying to substitute a word you spelled correctly, for another you didn't write in, or simply typo's on your part, spell check didn't catch).

I found some double wording, right together in one sentence. It's often best and easiest for me to turn off the spell check "auto-word replacement" feature and just let the spell check underline the major errors. Then go back through, very carefully on my own and make sure spell check didn't foul me up worse, or didn't catch words with numbers in them, or simply my own typo's.

You just cannot trust spell and grammar check, to do final manuscript editing! It won't catch all the errors, but will make a fool of you, real fast, if you don't go back and triple check your writing! A very slow and thorough read through, after doing spell and grammar check, is the only way I know, to accurately proof your final copy, before posting it!

Still, even with the few typos or double wording errors, this was such an excellent story and so well written! I am so impressed! Thoroughly enjoyed reading it! :)

I loved the way the erotic sexual parts, built so slowly and naturally, so true to life real; along with the back story and the way John realized finally, as he fell in love with young Rachel; that his and Kathy's marriage had been toast for some years already.

Kathy, though she likely didn't realize it, had already left the marriage and their home, a long time before she left, without telling John goodbye, to tend to her sister. She obviously didn't care a bit about John, nor their wonderful young children! This woman has some deep, deep problems and the divorce, forcing her to live alone for awhile, might just help her see what a cold fish, so frigid, she truly has been and is!

The author of this story, is such a good story telling writer, taking plenty of time, that: I was reading as fast as I could, waiting for that first time, John & Rachel made love, or finally got their ashes hauled! Man, what a bunch of good love scenes that you've written into this story, as well!

I agree with others here, maybe you should seriously think about writing more chapters of this story!

Did John and Rachel stay together the rest of their lives, happy to be with each other? I sure hope they did! But, unless you write a few more new chapters to this story, we're never going to really know all the details of them living "happily ever after" together in true love, or why they did, are we?

Maybe they talk, snuggled-up together in love some night, right after their marriage and John asks Rachel, how its is, a beautiful young woman her age, could fall in love with a man his age? He's got to be wondering! Maybe write some further good back-story about Rachel, into this chapter?

How about another chapter devoted to Kathy and her back story of why she just went frigid on John all those years ago and was pushing him away, until the divorce? Was it early menopause, cancer she didn't know she had yet, or was she having an affair of multi-year duration, behind Johns back, or did she just somehow shut-down in depression, or whatever? Why did she end-up hating John so, or treating him hatefully, when he really didn't have that mistreatment coming?

Surely John isn't the only "heavy" for cheating on his wife, who had shut him out and pushed him away sexually, and most every other way; treated him with disdain and disgust, disrespect for so many years, even though John remained devoted to her, almost until the end of their marriage!

WHY would Kathy not want to touch her husband sexually, any longer?

At least, there are some real deep questions you could answer for us all, with a few more well written chapters! :)

What does Kathy end-up doing with her life? Does she just slowly turn into a real Ice Queen/Ice-burg and slowly melt-away in the sea?

Lots of unanswered questions, throughout all you've written in this excellent story! Dozens of great plot twists and fun or interesting Rabbit Trails you could write into this story, if you have a mind to do so! That would be great fun for all us readers! :)

I think the thing I liked about this story most of all, is: its true-to-life...believability!

I've actually seen this very thing, or something very similar, happen in several married couples lives, I've known!

This was simply a very good, well written story and I enjoyed it a lot!

Thank you so much! :)

You should give us a part 2, Show us what their life becomes.

,,,cheat on the babysitter with the new babysitter?

great story I have read it at least 5 times. when are you going to do a follow up that tells what her parents think and about the wife who was she sleeping with and the life and love of john and Rachel after they moved into town home. MORE PLEASE

AMEN! to what Anonymous wrote on 03/04/18!!! If you want an editor for your future chapter of this story, you can contact me at cocorox1818 at yahoo dot com. Let's talk!

Excellent except for the very last sentence. Really stupid. Next time allow the reader's mind to interpret the future.

I loved it. How awesome is falling in love AND great sex. As good as it gets.

Rachel, John and the kids. Looks like Johns sister is on there side. The wife a cold fish I bet has been having a affair that's why she is such a bitch/

When do I get to read the follow up story.

Rachel has obviously selected her man and will do whatever it takes to land him. I'd like to have seen more of her eagerly using him and her encouraging him to do so. I'd also like to see an epilogue where Kathy and John end up in divorce court and the judge proceeds to take Kathy to the cleaners following depositions from Wendy, Rachel's mother, and a couple of the neighbors.

one of my favorites. when do we get to read the sequel. I feel sure that Kathy has been having an affair with one of her high brow friends either man or woman or both.

bring us up to date on John and Rachel and the kids/ it would be nice to find out why his ex wife to be turned into a cold fish towards him. if you have written one what is it called if not clue us in as to when it will be ready.

RON TEXAS cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

THE STORY IS GOOD AS IT IS ABOUT MAKING RIGHT CHOICES AND NOT BEING A COARD

Please

Good story but do you have to repeat the size of her tits every time you mention them, it is boring we know how big they are, you told us in the beginning, that's enough.

Fantastic story and it serves the bitch right. lol You don't give it out, it will be found elsewhere.

Good story. I would like to have had a bit more tiptoeing around, trying to be quiet with his Sister there and I did think that the end was hurried; very hurried. We needed the last scene as the first night in the new house, with the kids off with Aunty.

A sequel would be great but not to find out why the ex went cold fish - Women do that once they have what they want.

it is in my favorites. the cold fish wife was probably having a affair with a man possibly a woman(who knows).

I do wish that you would write a follow up story about Rachel John and the kids.

if you have written one what is it called?

RON TEXAS cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

Thanks for sharing.

What I liked best was that Rachel was so sweet! It made the story so much more compelling. Very nice way of handling it!

Rachel loves him she sees how his wife treats him . She made up her mind for them to be together the best thing that could happen to/for John.

Thanks for the great story, but the story just seemed to suddenly stop. A bit more of a ending would have made the story so much better.

I vote for number 2 Kathy was/is having an affair with one of her high brow snobs. It could be either a man or woman or both.

Rachel could tell that something was wrong in the marriage and she fell in love with John. She loved the kids and they loved her.

I am waiting to read the sequel about John,Rachel and the kids and see if Kathy is outed. The sister(Wendy) did not like Kathy but she and Rachel seemed to get along.

So be sure and let me know the name of the follow up story. 10 stars in my favorites

Ron Texas cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

This was fun

In order to fully enjoy this story,I decided that it was worth suspending the rules of reality and bask in the happiness. Things seldom turn out perfectly,but for once,at the end,all was right with the world!

The story reminds me of me. Divorced my first wife, there was no fire. Been remarried for the last 26 years and the fire is still burning. To me it is a real life story. Keep it up and write in the same realistic vein.

this is a wonderful story about realistic characters. Wishing you would write many more chapters of the happy ever after couple.

I think there's real chemistry and love between John and Rachel, and the way the soon to be ex wife is described makes it all seem right. And the sex is great. Wholesome AND raunchy! Rachel isn't just out for a conquest, and neither is John. Truly my favorite Literotica story of all-time. I keep coming back to it.

Amazing work.I enjoyed it.

Enjoyable story and how did it happen sister didn't become part of the equation? The story line ended much to suddenly, yet it was fun reading and then become serious. Keep your stories coming, including a couple more chapters for this new family.

YOUR COMMENT WAS NEARLY AS LONG AS THE STORY - DO YOU HAVE A STORY OR STORIES WE CAN REVIEW AND FIND YOUR MISTAKES? FIRST TIME I'VE REVIEWED THE COMMENTS FOUND SUCH A LONG AND BORING PUBLIC COMMENT. BOY, THEY SHOULD CHARGE YOU FOR USING SO MUCH WORDING.

You will always have one or more in the crowd of readers that has something to say. Who cares if there was a word here or there that was incorrect at least you took the time to write the story. We have talked about a sequil and you were generous enough to ask for my thoughts about a sequil and were happy to receive bmy thoughts.

Kathy(the wife) seemed to think that she is better than John and Rachel picked up on it and decided she loved him and he would be better of with someone that loved and varied for him. My thoughts are that Kathy is having an affair.

Ron8ae9

It would have been a 5* if the last sentence had been expanded into another page, similar to the way the rest of the story was written. Well done!

BTW, your spelling and grammar were better done than many authors. Enjoyed the entire storyline as you laid it out.

Fantastic work, great read!!

This is an amazing story, concerning John's awakening through Rachael's insight planning and action. Insight, over the last three years, aroused Rachael to accurately observe and evaluate John's failing marriage with Kathy. Through careful planning, Rachael excited John's desires for intimate moments (by wearing sexy outfits) and took leadership action in satisfying John with positive actions in prepared food, family fun, laughter and some old fashioned intimate sexual loving.

Wendy, John's sister, played a pivotal role in rocketing John's awakening in that life changing crux in the road, where his choice was a status quo miserable life with Kathy or a lifetime of ecstasies with ravishing Rachael!

Oh, by the way, the author gave us, the readers, fair warning about the proximity of Wendy's guest bedroom being next door to all the mewing moans and slurping of John and Rachael's love making. That warning worried me, since Wendy did awaken and then candidly witnessed something that she previously knew that Kathy had intimately abandoned her brother and Rachael was fulfilling his passionate hunger. Thank you, Wendy, for your thoughtfulness as you could have decimated two beautiful lives. Your patience blossomed the fruit of happily ever after!

Truly a touching magnificent story.

The best to all in love, health and happiness,

Domfrancisco

p.s. If you are a baby sitter with Rachael's instincts......be discrete, especially with Kathy! LOL!

I guess all's well that ends well. Some women just have to be a little careful who they let play baby sitter to the kids and the husband.

I like the story. The only item that stopped me from giving 5 stars was that the end seemed rushed (after they were found out).

You maintained a certain pace throughout the story, but it speeds up uncharacteristically after he admits to the ladies and himself that he should and will be with Rachel. Drawing this out (or ending it right there for dramatic effect) would keep the pace and thus make the ending feel less rushed.

Score one for the babysitter, and zero for their mother.

Whether Rachel had large boobs or not, she recognized the failing marriage between John and Kathy, then inserted herself between them. John would be crazy not to fall for the babysitter, who provided more care, love, and home making skill than the mother who seemed to ignore the rest of the family.

Enjoyed the story, even though the ending seemed somewhat abrupt.

Will there be a follow-on story? Hint--hint.

I love this story I have no idea how many times that I have read it. It is in my favorites yes Rachel stepped up and got her man she had come to love John and saw the way Kathy treated him. I do think that Kathy had a lover either male or female ir both. Being a bitch looses out and loving and wanting someone wins out. Even Johns sister Wendy did not like Kathy. Hurrah Rachel wins John and the kids and Wendy his sister. I am waiting for the sequil to be finished

Ron. Texas

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I would love to experience this (hint girls)

phoenix23ninja@gmail.com

Email me if you want to make this happen

By the way i dont check email that often

Very well written and structured. A good story line, not so predictable and very erotic. Great job!

I also enjoyed the story, finding it well written. As far as the subject matter goes, stuff like this really does happen everyday. Unfortunately, it usually does not have the happy ending that this one does, since, in the real world, sharks like Rachel will continue to climb the ladder of males, trying to better her situation, and John would eventually be left, a lonely man, with nothing but a gigantic child support bill, his hand and a memory (and maybe a prostitute on the weekend, if he could afford it). However, in this story, there is a good lesson to be learned by the wives out there who have for whatever reason, allowed their love life to go stale. It won't always be the sitter, but sometimes someone is watching and waiting, biding their time til they pounce on your man, and if you've given up, or have allowed him to think that the two of you are heading nowhere, he is vulnerable, and may succumb to the same temptation as John. You can't keep others away, and jealousy only makes the matter worse. Instead, talk to him like you did when you first met, do nice 'small' things. Get counseling if you can, with or without him, to keep things on track. Don't force yourself on him, but gently steer him back into seeing why you were the one he chose to be with, and that you still are that person, maybe just grown a bit more, which, because he has also, is a good thing. The grass is not always greener on the other side, if you remember to water the lawn, every now and then (or maybe even mow it, if ya know what I mean. ;) lol). Because, as nice as this story seems, in real life it is usually a train wreck for all involved, and it can be avoided, if you start maintaining it, today. Anyway, I'll get off my soapbox now. Thank you for reading, and thank you for the story, and God bless Literotica.com!

The story was fine until the last 1/3 of Chapter 3. It was almost like you got bored with it and just through together the ending.

The fact that you made Kathy such a bitch made Rachel and her big tits all the more appealing. I loved that John at least made an effort to save his marriage. Good story, but I agree with the previous comment that stated that the ending was a bit rushed.

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I tottally relate to this story...almost exactly like what happened to me! Except babysitter was 22, and not in school. My ex bitch wife hated it!! Hehehe!! Good story!

Too bad Rachel didn't work her horny magic on Wendy and they could have had a wonderfully squishy 3-way.

Penis

I thought the ending was rather abrupt. It didn't explain much about the future of John and Rachel.

Except for the unlikely ending this was a very good story and hot as hell . Life isn't really that simple or easy to change,but two thumbs and a hard dick up !!!!!

I agree with the anonymous guy who posted that rachel john and wendy should have a three way. or, it could also be rachel john and kathy. i don't like the ending.

Only the fucking pages and one of the best I've read here...... Fuck you for making it so short!!!! GAAAHHH!!!

Nothing needs to be add to your story - it's a five.

need a chapter 2

The ending was way to short; it just quit fairly abruptly. There was no mention of their issues from Kathy's point of view, why she acted the way she did, and why she accepted the divorce as easily as she did. It seems that Wendy was introduced into the story just to force John to admit his feelings for Rachel. Etc.

This is the best story I have read . Just too beautiful .

It was a five but damn, you just rushed that ending. You could have made that phone call to the bitch really interesting. Just let it flow next time.

You'd have gotten a 5 if you didn't just slap and ending on it.

Wow. Such an abrupt ending. There's no real deadline here. Next time take the time to finish the story.

This story was amazing. What other stories have this type of feel to it?!

Well, that story committed suicide right there at the end, didn't it?

Damn that ending was fast. No setup for a sequel (which i bet many of us would have liked) but that isn't too bad. I just wish the main character wasn't so decisive... Let im struggle a little, get stressed and then figure out what the hell to do for a few more pages and would have gotten a five.

Always wanted my babysitting jobs to end this way!!

Amusingly enough, I was one of the sitted, at 14 I seduced the babysitter who was watching my bestfriends younger siblings...

Another well written story (5 Stars) by one of Literotica's most prolific authors. I too thought the ending was a bit too abrupt and precludes another story. Otherwise, a great story and fantasy of many guys; especially those of us well over 30. Well Done, Sir!

What an amazing story,if only life were like that.