All Comments on 'A Proper Send-off'

Thanks. It is great.

wowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

left breathless, and a bit damp lol

super story!

carrie

ps: actually very wet :)

y only 5 stars ... most x'cellent

I love it when an author isn't afraid to write a slow courtship, instead of diving into the sex by paragraph 2.

I had a stiffy from the first kiss. Thanks.

Very sweet, very romantic, and very sexy. Well-written, too. Thanks from hentaigirl9 (login doesn't work, for some reason).

Great characters,great story,wonderful buildup.

Thanks

It's one of the best stories I've read in this site, really sweet and sympathetic. All characters are well worked on and the buildup is famously great.

I despise the military, but this story reminds us of the beings of flesh and blood who work there and suffer for what they think right.

outstanding story!

simply beautiful!!!

That was truly amazing.

Definitely worth it.

Sizzling hot and emotional, and extremely well written. The characters were well-rounded and believable and the banter was top-notch. I appreciate the patriotism aspect a lot as well. Very very good work. Will definitely read again sometime, and check out your other works in the meantime. Thanks for sharing!

more please.........please do a follow up..ok..

Like the others have said. Well written and also well researched. I am in the military and all your references about training and the current repel of "dont ask dont tell" make the story feel so current and believable. I also hope that the reunion story is just as hot. Keep up the good work!

This is exactly what I was looking for, I didn't expect I would find it, but here it is. Very well done!

A lovely story. Please consider continuing or writing a sequel as the girls start their lives together.

This is a very well written story that I would love to see made into a video or film complete with the hot sex scenes including all the strap-on action. I love reading about stong, handsome, soft butch women who can pick up their pretty femme girlfriends and carry them off to bed. Also this had a very nice and sweet ending. Keep up the good work.

Wish I could find a sexy soldier to fuck me silly with her strap on. I love it keep writing!!!

Left Hot, wet, and breathless...

An absolutely perfect love story! Full of heart, emotion, eroticism, lust & love. Not to mention some of the hottest sex I've read in a story yet! This is an absolute must read! 5 stars all the way!

Beautiful story. Hot and sweet and real. More!!!!

Love that line. And the whole story! I'll be looking through your submissions to see what I've been missing.

Best story I have read on here in quite a while

You are an amazing writer, my favorite. I always look forward to reading your stories. Best stories out there in my book. Great story lines, in-depth character analysis, and smoking hot sex! Especially this one. Can't wait to read more, keep it up!

brilliant cant wait for more best story iv read on this site in a long time

oh.my.goodness. That was fantastic. Thank you ST. I so enjoyed the simple witty banter between Sarah and June, the sexual tension that led to life altering (in June's case), mind blowing sweet and rough sex, a back story that didn't get lost in excessive detail, but wasn't mono tone either....geez that was good. Don't forget that Sarah said that eating June to a "screaming, shaking orgasm" was for their reunion, please don't make your adoring fans wait an entire year!

~besitos

That story hit all my buttons in all the right places. I lost count how many times I came and if I met you in bar like that I would love to have my world rocked like June. Great Story and Good Hot Lesbian Sex my favorite of all stories on Literotica. Love to buy the movie so I have the visual as well as the sensory view.

I loved the story. It was captivating and well written. I could not break away from reading it.

Completely taken by the range of emotions and details. All I ask is that you please continue this wonderful story. Thank you.

Love this fanfic. Please continue this, with possibility of marriage & family.

this story is great,I love it, two thumbs up, if i had more thumbs they would be up too. . .

Enjoyed this a lot!! Was fun to read and just really felt relaxed as I enjoyed!! Loved the concept and everything about this story!! THANKS!!

Love this story

This had a lot of feeling in it. It was well written, and frankly...not at all what I espected. Good job, and keep writing.

Oh, and Jim is best pony. ;P

I loved it! Definatly not what I was expecting and I need to have more! That's an order ;)

Amazing.. Nuff said

Imma soldier and that was by far the best thing I ever read. I already called my girl and told her what I want mailed to me when I deploy

Loved it, 5/5 for you :')

How fucking amazing was this. Omg. Please continue with this story. It's amazing, you're amazing.

This story was the best I've read on this site...or anywhere else. Your writing rocks!

Can I just say...wow?!? I'm literally at a loss for words as to how amazing this was. It was definitely exactly what I needed. Thank you.

This was awesome...I'm wet and drooling now!! Thank you very much.

please PLEASE write more stories like this...cuz it was fuckin awesome!!

The character build-up ... the description of the beginning of their sexual encounter, which is *exactly* what it is like to be with a straight girl for the first time, followed by absolutely mind-blowing descriptions of lesbian sex - I want a sequel!

Very rare to find a story on this site that doesn't make me roll my eyes and think: "Oh, please. Yeah right." Your story was realistic and the plot line involving a marine and a civilian was a fantastic literary choice. Excellent work.

Great story, excellent build up, Fabulous sex.!!! 10 stars out of 5!!!

PS:

I was so wet, I had to change my shorts half way through - seriously

Congratulations! Your story has been chosen by the men and women who make up the ASSOCIATION of INDEPENDENT READERS as a winner in their 2011 Winter Holiday Contest. An honor that simply reflects and tries to repay you for your great story.

Thanks for taking the time and effort to entertain us. The readers of this site are lucky to have you among us.

Jacqui O, President of the A.I.R.

Holy Sweet Mother of God, that was easily the best story I've read on here in the 3 years I've been reading. It's also the first that I've read all the way to the end AFTER cumming, a real pleasure to read. Thank you.

Wonderful, emotive story telling, full of tenderness, wit, heat and I think the beginnings of love...or maybe just more lust. ;) So glad I set time aside to give it my full attention. Good luck!

~Luna

Thanks everybody for your votes, comments and feedback on what became my first contest winning story here on Lit!

I'm really glad that reaction has been so positive even if it does take the form of demanding more of it.

Will there be a sequel? Probably not. They've got a happier ever after. I doubt I mess with that. Will there be a film version? God, I hope so. If anyone knows a film studio that wants to option this feel free to point them my way. I'd totally help them with casting suggestions(Kristanna Loken and Christina Hendricks?)

Happy Holidays everyone!

Well worth it taking a bit to get to the juicy stuff!! You deserve that prize :)

Tender, hot, controversial, in a way, and topical. Congrats on your prize. You deserved it.

Very Very well done the best lesbian story i've read so far.

Impressive, really well done.

Great story. The only quibble I have is that Veteran's Day is always on 11/11 of any year, no matter what... hafta go take a very long, icy shower now and change my, um, unmentionables...

Freaking loved it, great story about those of us who sacrifice chunks of our lives for the people around us, and a love story blossoming from an effort to thank one of us.

Just hope that, gay or straight, I'm so fortunate someday, us tankers need love too. Thank god for mechanics.

I love a love story, and this one is epic.

This just gets better and better every time I read it.

I just loved this story

Wow, this story is definitely one of my favorites. Very well written, paced well, and just enough of a conclusion that you can get away with not writing a sequel though I'm sure we'd all love that too.

That was amazing. Makes me want to try it with a girl...

Sexy, passionate kisses, and kissing which I just love, being a retired Marine I loved the military side of it.....GREAT SEX.....you have got to write a follow up story of these to ladies...LOVED IT!!

Loved It!!!!

Truly enjoyed the build-up and romance of this fiction.

I hope you find time to share more of your writing.

v/r

Absolutely loved it! Thank you for a good story

This is the first I've discovered you, and I will certainly get to the rest of your work. I love the way you created and maintained the sexual tension between them, and I love the way you resolved it. And as an old, straight, male vet, it was nice that the story was set in a military context. Thank you so much for sharing your talent.

DP

i've read this 4 times now and I literally cream my undies every single time, I begging you to write a second chapter.......PLEASE!! Your an amazing writer and i've read all your other stuff I can't get enough of it!

The way you presented this story was truely beautiful. Had me tears and made me wet at the same time. Love to read more about women in the military ;-)

First of all, you are an amazing writer. This story was simply fantastic, and I absolutely loved it, and it had me smiling, in tears and absolutely loving Sarah and June! :') amazing. Please keep up the amazing, sexy work <3

As a lesbian veteran myself, I can't thank you enough for this. I was Air Force, not Army, but... if I'd had something like this to come home to, I think maybe I could've done a few more years. This is simultaneously very well-targeted (it speaks to my experiences AND hits a lot of my target areas fantasy-wise) and very well-written. This is hands down the best erotic story I've read. Ever.

This is like my fourth time reading? It's so perfect :)

Why did I wait so long to read this?? It was masterful! Perfect! And I admit I cried through the last 2 pages. My god, when did I become such a sap?? Damn! So glad it ended the way it did! Can I give 10 stars?

Also a lesbian veteran, marine corps not army....I've read this multiple times and it gives me insane chills and familiar feelings everytime....amazing.

What an amazing story - usually when i see a story thats 7 pages long it has been known for me to shy away and find something else to read however your story had me captivated from the word go! I was compelled to read it to the bitter end. Amazing writing! Your a favourite of mine and i cant wait to read other work by you!

Being both a husband and a father, I found it odd that I would wind up reading this story by pure chance. As my title suggests, I don't usually read this genre. I'm more of a fan of the first time (mine was very disappointing, and having a toddler makes romantic encounters few and far between).

However, your story goes much deeper than it first seemed, and was pleasantly surprising. You convey a feeling of longing that is powerful and moving. It's incredibly easy to resonate with the situation, extrapolate it into literally any form and enjoy it far deeper than in a superficial sense.

Well done on the story. I would highly recommend you keep writing, and don't limit your talents to any one genre.

Rex

Do we ever know ourselves one of your best stories. Just one correction the Amazon's in Herodotus history were first classified as legend, that was until they found their graves north of the Black sea. They were Iranian women who ruled their clans, were not allowed to marry till after their first kill in battle.

Janice

This was the best!! Omg

I loved it, i didnt just read it i felt,lived,loved it..!!!

(: more???!

I begg you

Hands and knees

Omfg unbelievable I swear of all the stories I read here this is the best! I loved it I felt like I was. Watching a movie. Like it was unfolding infront of my eyes damn! Great great story! I wish u would do more about them lol the characters I love them great job definitely my fav hot hot story of all time excellent

This story is just what I was looking for-- An AMAZING romance story, coupled with perfectly written sex! God, this was just simply amazing.

Man this was a pleasure to read. I didn't even think about the sex so much as the writing. As an editor nothing irks me more than incorrect grammar, but the quality of your writing made me ignore the few errors that existed. Good job, and keep writing!

COME BACK TIME AND TIME AGAIN , LOVE IT .. CONTINUE THIS STORY PLEEEEAAAAAAASSSSSEEEEE !!!!

I believe this story is one of the best ever written and i loved it with all my being! Never stop writing like this. This expressed all my fantasy and feelings. -Rebecca L.

I came here with the intention to... what everyone comes here for. But, I ended up reading one of the best short stories I've ever read. Bravo. I'm not one to leave comments or reviews after reading. If you have more I'll definitely read.

Awwww!

I usually don't like reading long stories unless it is enticing, and this one is. "You had me from hello", reeled me in.

I think this is the best story on the site.

I love this story. I was trying to go back but hit the 1 star instead. :(

I LOVE THIS STORY.

I sat and read this whole thing without stopping. It was exciting sexually, but also amazing because I know what it's like to miss someone, a soldier. Endearing. Well-written. Great.

this was a beautiful story, the ending really touched my heart and made me touch myself also!

Probably the best story I've read on Literotica...grateful to have stumbled upon it...

Must track down my gf now. This story was realistic and like the others have said, one of the best on the entire site. I happened to stumble upon this myself today. Thank you thank you for such a beautiful story.

The story line is great! Loved it!

Couldn't stop reading, just had to continue.

how else can i describe it... this is the nth time i've read this and still it never fails to make me laugh with the sarcastic humour... feel the heat of each moment just simply enjoy reading your story <3

I'm supposed to wake up in a few hours but I do not regret finishing this at all. More than worth it. Beautiful, sweet, funny, perfect!

This story is one of the best ones on here. It shows the relationship grow and it's a beautiful thing! Do another one please :)

An absolutely phenomenal, beautiful story expertly written and executed! Well done you even had me wanting June, and I prefer small breasts.

Absolutely amazing the only sad thing is there aren't Any better then this

I typically like reading porn just to get off, but this had me smiling in that, "d'aww" type of way at the end. Fantastic.

I usually just read things while I'm waiting for a video to load, but I didn't need a video after finishing this thing. Fantastic story!

Great story, loved it. Keep it up!

I loved this. A wonderful blend of romance and rawness. Kept me reading to the end. Please keep writing, you have a definite gift.

OMG! What a wonderful romance and erotic story with well developed characters and great story line!

I'm retired from the Navy and never was able to enjoy the benefits of DADT being abolished. Currently I'm in June's situation waiting for someone to come home. However, A Proper Send-Off is very accurate about being an ocean away from the ones you think are important and the ones who turn out to be very important.

I intend to take some inspiration from the incredibly HOT sex! Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!