i can't wait to read more
Good first effort. Thanks for the entertainment. Mike from Texas
I couldn't tell from your comment at the beginning if this was your first story here or first anywhere. Either way, good first chapter. I'm most intrigued by the shifter and really want to know what his past is. He mentions his tribe also. I wonder why he seems so alone if he is part of a pack/tribe?
on your first story. I was entertained by your story. I was also left asking questions and wanting more.We know alittle about Lily's background but not much on Agis. I almost get the impression he's the Alpha and if not at least a Beta. What is going to be Lily's response when she wakes up wrapped in the arms of a man, a man/wolf to be exact?
Again congrats on your first of hopefully storys to Lit. And thank you for sharing YOUR story!
This golds much promise of an amazing story can't wait for more
Hope u continue! I really enjoyed your story. Only one question- do his clothes shift with him? Thank you for writing! DW
Wow what a great start!! super impressed with this being your first!!! Keep up the awesome work and look forward to the next one!!!! ;)
A very nice start to this story. Can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing
Please continue this, it's a fantastic start, you've pulled me in.
Just found a new story! now i'm gonna sit and wait while I wag my tail.....
*tail wagging...puppy dog look
....clicking 5 stars until you post the next chapter.
I really like how you describe this story. I just wish you would have describe Lilly more.
I love the start of this story...please continue :)
Already booked marked it please add more chapters soon
Can't wait to see where this goes, have put in favorites:)
In love with this story already!!! Please continue :)
Please do continue.. I look forward to reading more..
A beautiful start,keep it up.
Oh man, this is a great start. I really hope that you keep this going and where your mind takes this story but you have alot of room to work with and I will gladly read what you post next. Only bad thing about this is that the chapter is to short. good luck and happy writting.
Looking forward to more chapters.
Like this story and cannot wait for the next chapter.
I truly hope that you will continue the story. Your writing is good, let's see more of it!
Beautiful start, I can't wait for the next chapters. :)
He sounds like Sesshomaru from the show InuYasha with the way you described him
now where is/are the next chapters? please come back!! :)
to your story!! I cannot wait to read the rest of your story, so I do hope you post another chapter on here ASAP!! Thank you! :)
Definitely sounds like Sesshomaru. Especially the way he's softening because of a human girl on the run from evil men. Have you read/watched Inuyasha? Also, great start. Please continue soon. And also, more physical descriptions of Lily.
I love a good were story, and this is very promising! Why haven't you updated it?? I'm curious to find out why she is naturally so defiant--she couldn't have been born into slavery, or in a culture that it was common, could she? Is her former master going to appear in future chapters? Please keep going...
where's the rest, dammit?!
i am very into this story i think it is really good and i cant wait for another chapter please write a new chapter soon.
Please update this story with new chapters. It's very promising and I would Love to be able to continue reading it. I would be very greatful if you continue this story. :)
with slightly bated breath for more.
" Moar!!! " She yelled impatiently at her tiny iPod screen. She was growing tired waitng for updates. 'This is just so damn incredible! Why does the author stop and leave me hanging? It's like baiting a hungry, straved animal with teeny bits of scrap food.' She unhappily thought. So, she repeatedly yelled "Moar!!" at her teeny screen to come to nothing. She grumpily hopes that the autthor would update soon. And thus, with this final comment she goes to sleep.
This story was AMAZING! And the comment just before mine is funny lol
U gotta Write more
Please write more
freaking write chapter twoo already! more more
AWESOME!! AWESOME!!! AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
YES!! MOAR PLEASE!!!
To be continued.....blah blah blah, just another author on here that doesn't finish their story. Why post anything at all if you don't intend to keep posting? Fed up waiting for an update on this story.
this is tooo good not to finish all 300 chapters (smile)
Tricked again! I have been reading this site for 8 years. I have never seen so many unfinished stories! Just do a one shot for gods sake! Stop it with the to be continued...
Definitely worth a continuation...hopefully you'll have the urge to begin again :)
Are you EVER going to carry on with this story? It has been 2 years since you started it. It is/was a very promising read, and I cannot understand why you won't continue. For all I know, you probably don't read these comments any more. But if you do, then please write a comment to tell us what is happening. PLEASE!
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