All Comments on 'First Discovery Ch. 01'

Nice opening for a wonderful story I believe is coming. Lots of words you hold will be enjoyed more once they're told in your First Discovery. Please make it a multi-chapter great story...........

I loved the beginning

Next part please

we all know where this is heading, and we can't wait to get there!

great start. can't wait to read more.please continue the story soon!

Please continue this! Its really good and I wanna see where it's going.

Great beginning!! more more

Wnt more, nyd more, got 2 hv MORE!

more and longer is better. great set up

Awesome start,,, Can't wait to read the next installment!

Well written, very good setup, but kinda short. can't wait for more.

its a fantastic start! I love it so far, its realistic and very hot so far! please keep going :)

Great start & I can't wait to see where it's going!

PLEASE MORE THATS A AWSOME START .. LONGER WOULD BE AWSOME ..CANNOT WAIT TO READ THE NEXT CHPT..

DANG!!! hurry and get the next chapter up. this story is awesome!

...but for the really annoying spelling! ("your" when you should have "you're", "are" instead of "our" "breathe" / "breath", "of" / "off", etc)

Five stars otherwise, but can only give you four.