by 2marcella2
if you write with a little more sexual intensity your next story could be great
It got to the sex way too fast, and the readers found out she was pregnant way too soon. I was generous in giving 2 stars when it clearly deserved only one. Just bad. Keep trying though. Don't let my opinion discourage you. It was only your first story.
I couldn't read it all the way through. I'm into seduction, not into rape or forced sex.
... but I liked it. Nice introduction, something we all can take further if we so choose ......
However, I hate Father raping daughter. This was more of a rape story than a loving parent.
It was Rape of his daughter no matter if she enjoyed it or not, he had sex with her not out of love but punishment.
What if it didn't turn out the way it did she could have been traumatized for life like so many other Rape victims.
Can you give a little heads up about the rape please? Good writing but not my thing.
What do you think the disclaimer meant when it said "this story contains non-consensual sex"? Non-consensual means without consent.
Rape isn't exactly what I think father daughter sex is about , but I suppose it was pretty steamy. My word of advice is write more about the daughter seducing her father. That makes my pussy hot and horny as hell!