All Comments on 'Sister Seduces'

by geronimo_appleby

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m62cygm62cygabout 12 years ago
more

lets have part 2 and the secret please.

bachgenbachdrwgbachgenbachdrwgabout 12 years ago
Of course

. . . more, more more :-)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
I agree ....

At LEAST a part two .... maybe a part 3 or 4 .... what happens for the next few days?????

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
more

Great start . More please.

worshipper622worshipper622about 12 years ago
Hot, Hot, Hot!

Did you write this in the midst of the act itself?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Intriguing

Now we need background and outcomes.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
good but

rules to write by

1) never rush to post always do it right and use a good editor

2) never leave the readers hanging unless you are going to post a new chapter in a few days.

3) never delete comments or block comments

4) if you decide you don't want to continue and the story isn't finished either find another writer to finish for you or delete the story

5) listen to all comments and learn from the readers don't let your ego ruin your stories.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
HOT!!!!

More please...

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Need more. End of story. ;)

I want more!!

petecopetecoabout 12 years ago
continue

This story is good ( even if anonymous five step didn't think so ) I agree you should not be fishing for compliments but it is up to you weather you continue on or not. If you need further input from us readers I say another ch. or two would be nice. ( not a dozen though )

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
nice

this was a well if written if roughly written story and a few more chapters to thicken the plot would not hurt

EmpLucianDarkBladeEmpLucianDarkBladeabout 12 years ago
not bad at all for a rush

This is not a bad peice for a rush, do not take it negitively if people dont understand, as for more. Yes that would be great to understand what happens next.

PrincessErinPrincessErinabout 12 years ago
Sexy

I haven't read anything from you in a while and since I just wrote an incest story myself I wanted to read this and compare.

You really described the emotional connection between the siblings well and although it was rushed and short you got the point across. Sometimes a stroke story is what is needed.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Brilliant work!

You have an excellent command over both erotic narrative and the English language. I sincerely hope you write more often and you write longer stories. You have tremendous talent. Bravo!

matatridmatatridabout 12 years ago

For a quick story that got straight to the sex, you were still able to build up the tension and have it hot. This is the first story of yours I've read, so I'll read more. Loved your description and the cliff hanger did leave me wanting to know what will happen next.

sngalmomsngalmomabout 12 years ago
wow

you have talent. for something written fast it had all that was needed to more than get the job done. you have a good command of langage and emotion that comes through. I will be reading all that you have wrtten and look forward to much more. as to the secret .....hum maybe that is where the next story starts. however I would like to hear that daddy was part of it.

tturtle50tturtle50about 12 years ago
Please!

Say there is more!

rosspalrosspalabout 12 years ago
Slut

Oh my, you wonderful slut. I love her. More.5++

PolyLvrPolyLvrabout 12 years ago
Love it

Thanks for another teader, G.A. Beautifully written. I'm off to read the next part.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
How heavenly! You make me feel like having a sister like this so that I can lick her love-juice every night.so heavenly.so sweet.

Excellently amorous.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
kool

Ok I like that one ....that sounds like it happend lol good job ...very very nice

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
My Guess

My guess at what she said..."I'm pretty sure you made me pregnant, brother,"

Turtle1952Turtle1952over 7 years ago
excellent

very erotic, please keep going

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
More

Definitely need to continue the story!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
Hard To Follow!

This story jumped around without letting the reader know clearly where it was going and it challenges the vocabulary of most people. Non-the-less, it was still sufficiently erotic for most readers of erotic literature.

LegallySaneLegallySaneover 2 years ago

The taste of cigarettes killed it for me. Big turn off.

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