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It Started on New Year's Eve

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by Anonymous

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by tazz31712/31/11

FROM THE 1ST TO THE

bedroom alone and self satisfying. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Anonymous12/31/11

Sequel

Not gonna leave us hanging right? It's a good start.

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it started new years eve

great start! please keep it going sooner than later

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by Anonymous12/31/11

needs an editor

Don't know where some authors were educated but they could use an editor. This rotten use of "..." and "word -- word" structure for a pause isn't proper nor accepted, this is the function of the simple coma (,) and ending a sentence with "--" also is improper. A good editor who will see and remove such bad usage is needed.

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by Anonymous01/01/12

Pauses

The incorrect pauses didn't bother me that much, I'd have to say it was the boredom I had while reading it that produced all the bother.

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by Anonymous01/01/12

This is pretty good.

She's got a good head on her shoulders. He's probably a jerk, but she's giving him a chance to do things the right way. What's not to like? Yeah, the ellipses should be handled correctly, but this is a first story. Good structure, she's evolving, hope she doesn't get hurt.

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by Anonymous01/01/12

need more

good but need to keep going

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by Averygoodlay01/04/12

Good start

Story has a good start, I'll wait for more before making any judgment.

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