All Comments on 'Dirty Girl'

Persoanlly, a smashing story! The only real critisism is there's just not enough! I would suggest maybe just adding more detail to what you already have, as what you do have, is a very erotic frame work. Great on its own, but bulk it out some more to really give it the edge!

Regards,

The Doughboy

very very good :-)

love your stories only just discovered them they get me so horny but i am always left wanting more!! that frustrates me.x

Great job here!! I enjoyed this story immensely

fucking hot. got me off soooo good

Good job, I like the way you think!

loved it,horny as hell

... but I have to agree with Doughboy, more detail.

a great story, very hot. needs much followup.

You're a talented writer & you're tastes mirror mine. Can never get enough of licking & fucking my little buttslut's fartbox

Well done!