All Comments on 'Helpless Ch. 02'

I would love to be Natalie! Very good story

MOREEE?

Loved the story it's my dream

is HAL still around. TK U MLJ LV NV

oh goe i want to be natalie ,what a great story write more soon please x

I hope you write more.

mamba, please continue this great story......if only i could be magically changed in to a gorgeous female.........i'd be a cocksucker supreme!!.............and a few other thing too.!!!!

you are a great writer, would love another 3 or 22 chapters PLEASE........this seems to be a common story theme.....but somehow, your's is the BEST, all around....nice jub really,,,,,,,,more please!!!

please continue this story its so hot, i just wish it was me

The writing improved greatly over the first installment, but I'm not one to go for the mega-chapter stories that populate this site. You do a good job of telling the story with few (if any) spelling or grammatical errors, which is a plus if you wanted to take this talent further. In some other story in the future, a more gradual change might be approached so that a continued tale wouldn't just dissolve into a orgasm-filled dialogue. Hold back some and let the ideas develop.

I would like you to continue writing. Not just for this storyline, but in general. I love the empathy you have for the female characters.

Great storie should have been told

A little slower and more details but I did love it

good story, needs more information about what is going on.

Interesting story

The concept is good but make it longer

Maybe tell us how he got captured and

Let the guys treat him like a real slut maybe

BDSM?

Good job

Yes!! I totally agree make it BDSM

That would make my pussy so wet

I need a cock right now, or pussy :)

Keep it up

Try to be more creative instead of just "a single tear" every time. But all in all, a very good erotica. Great story body, punctuation, and spelling unlike other erotica

Like I said before I wish it was really possible

I would love more please make more

A few more chapters would be great. As Miss Rhodes fate is still in the balance, will she ever be a free person again & who is currently controlling and why did they select Cody?

Also a proof reader should be used as there are several proper words wrongly used, spoiling the flow of the story.

I love this story. I only wish that I could be Natalie. More please