All Comments on 'Naive'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago

it is a very good reading for me

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fridayamfridayamabout 12 years ago
A lovely read

and just the right balance of sex and story.

Scotsman69Scotsman69about 12 years ago
Most arousing

precisely because it is so real

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
get real

Get real as "AHHHHHHHHH" etc. isn poor writting style and form. The use of emotional "AH" acceptable and common, the addition of a modifier for indicating a drawn out "AH" of for example "moaned", "moaning", etc is far better and proper.

Alexandra831Alexandra831about 12 years ago
Its all good.

To Annon, Wtf are you talking about. I read the story and everything seems just fine.

even that AHHHH parts. I knew what she was saying, what the person was feeling.. Damn shit like that irritates me.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Interesting story

Good story with realistic feelings and actions. A large clit can be used to woman's advantage

lcluckylcluckyabout 12 years ago
enjoyed

I really enjoyed the story. Keep up the good work.

AverygoodlayAverygoodlayabout 12 years ago
Good start

Good start keep on writing.

I don't know if it was your intention but I found a bit of humor in the girls thoughts and amazements of her own body.

Now that she has had an orgasm she will want more.

scorpio415scorpio415about 12 years ago
Great work

Keep it up, I want more from Ryann and Jack! Perhaps develop their relationship a little more.

H.H.MorantH.H.Morantabout 12 years ago
First rate

It WAS real in the sense that she - unlike the vast majority on this list - wasn't a multiorgasmic virgin - orgasm, yes - through intercourse, no

And the author has the opportunity to show us more of Ryann's adventures (sparing us what sometimes seems to be a mandatory FF scene) before her ultimate (I hope) defloration

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Pretty Dumb Start

Let's see, somehow being a ballerina stops girls from talking and boys from pursuing. I don't think so. My sister was a ballerina and it was grueling, but she did have a boyfriend.

Also, you neglect to mention that she must have had some type of guardian, such as a MOTHER! I do suppose that she did watch some TV, read Dear Abby or the internet. I do suppose that she went to school and attended sex education classes.

With such a stupid beginning this wasn't worth finishing.

OleguyOleguyalmost 10 years ago
God bless the 'Anons'

They are so damned incompetent that they do not risk their own tender sensibilities but try to lay down rules for the rest of us.

My small amount of sexual experience definitely showed that all women are different.

Vive le difference'

AnonymousAnonymous6 months ago

Very awkward dialogue.

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