All Comments on 'Jake and Riley: The Beginning Ch. 01'

for one or the other.. TK U MLJ LV NV

knock reverberated through the room - sounds like someone was banging with a hammer.

what was at the door, no, who was at the door.

Her legs looked infinite; infinitely fat? what? you meant go on forever.

An editor should be able to help you so that the story is enjoyable to readers like me.

Thanks

ttom

Is there more to this story? Very juicy Just like Jake I want more !