All Comments on 'Siblings Experiment With Sex'

this is a story of a bro and sis enjoyin themselves w/help then mom moves in at the end. well writen!

Very strange nrmal people dont talk like that or act like that

I liked it but the short sharp sentences made it slow and seem primtive. Try and make longer sentances and make it sound professional and you got a winner!

Short, choppy, primitative sentences and a very unbelievable story... honestly, what kind of normal people act like that? Horrible story...... you show promise, but this story is garbage.

The premise is good but the story seems way to rushed and a bit jumpy. so jumpy that its almost hard to follow.

Dialogue is a big problem, for people that are supposedly over 18, they talk like they are no older than 13. i also found it difficult at times placing where the characters are at different points.

sorry but this thing needs some serious improvement.

The mother son part was too much

Who does their mom? That was sick.

it started good but went downhill when julie got involved then it crashed when he started dating julie and sis started dating don and it went to hell when you got the mom involved keep it simple and just between the siblings from now on this really needs a rewrite eliminating the extra people

it reads like a first draft not a finished story way to choppy also it would have been much better if you kept it to just the two siblings getting julie and don involved killed it especially when julie borrowed don to see what a big cock felt like just plain stupid get an editor and do a rewrite

Use more than the Simple English Dictionary. The fact that it sounded like a children's story weirded me out... Is English your first language?

My mom and dad are the same and they tell me that I will eventually be able to tie my own shoes. Isn't it wonderful??

This is written by someone else for I cannot find the words. Bye.....

If all of you are so good at telling others what is wrong with their stories, Why don't you show the rest of us just how well you write.

Remember most are just learning to write, If you have something to say

, at least sign your name or send them feed back.

I really enjoyed this story. Not sure if there will be or is a sequel, but would like to see one.

A rule of thumb to everybody, make the story believable. These people are going to graduate high school and you wrote a story that would have fit kids just starting puberty. There are no kids especially those raised on a farm that would be that naive at eighteen. That is almost as ridiculous as the stories written where the guy has a dick bigger than six inches and the girls are some enormous d cup. The first thing an author should do learn how a woman’s bra is sized. A woman with 40dd would have a top measurement of 45inches and would be fat. Keep it realistic so we can picture ourself in the story.

Pathetic

Boys who have twin sisters are NEVER shy with girls. And the people you describe here are definitely twelve, not even a retarded eighteen.