All Comments on 'The Target Ch. 02'

good start to the story.. but the chapters are too short.. can't wait to see if this has a happy ending :)

Amazing!!!

Please make your chapters longer! Your writing is very good, perhaps work on your grammar?

Constructive critism.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Looking forward to more more more....

One glaring error, Jackie knows Roman was hired to kill him and leaves him asleep in his living room unrestrained? That is just stupid.

Again? Really? You just had to didn't you? Hope to read more soon..make that real soon like yesterday lolz...can't wait to read more..love it....dont care if he left a drugged out assassin on his floor..if you were reading you would know that he regretted drugging him, and is in the process of the whole butterfly in his stomach shindig. Write more soon :-) pleazzze :-D

I like the tug and pull between these two (no pun intended :) But really they are both coming off as amateurs with each other. I'd like to see you prove they're both just severely off their game b/c of the other person. I hope as they decide how to move on that they show the cunning and skills of a real assassin. I am also wondering about Jackie and how he got into being an assassin. if he was good at it, why would people not fear him and instead be out to get him. I also can't understand how he'd be so easy to find and not be more careful when he's got a damn broken foot and isn't going to be getting away from someone quickly. So, I guess, I want it to go one way or another. Either they are good at their job or not. If they are good at it, I'd like to see less ridiculous mistakes...like someone else pointed out..you drug an assassin and then go to sleep knowing he'll come around soon?

I'm still interested in the characters and want to see where it goes.

Hurry with the next one!!

JACKIE is 21 and he's been a hit man for 5yrs???????¿???