All Comments on 'You Never Even Wrote Ch. 01'

It needs to be edited, I think you can find an editor through lit if you don't have one, the larger paragraphs need to be broken up. Keep writing though.

it probably wasnt. TK U MLJ LV NV

Spelling, homonyms, and grammar.....these things count!

I absolutely love the way you write. It's refreshing, it's different. More please

Who tried to kill her? Make it someone other than Kristi. Great job

It's a good start. You're concentrating on character and relationships, which is what leads readers to care about the people in the story, along with a bit of tension and a hint of danger to make the narrative more interesting. Like most people making love for the first time, it will take practice to get better at it. Don't give up, you have genuine potential!

i appreciate the feedback. and i promise i'll get an editor for the next few chapters, i know my grammar sucks, sorry!

Great story i loved it

I am attempting writing these stories and was wondering if you used elements or past experiences err somthing like that? If so like percentage wise how much? Like tweaks?

Im not tryin to be stalker ish btw

I used a little bit of personal experiences and all the characters are based off of real life people that i know. its just that i took what was in my head as a fantasy and wrote it out. so some of its real life but its mostly just how i wish things were. best advice i can give is to just start writing and let it come to you.

good start to this first story YOU NEVER EVEN WROTE CH1

i can see this story turning to to one big hot horny story .