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by Dice_Casden04/08/12

Nice story

Just some feedback, you had a nice story here, but I think you could've done it a bit better with more details of each action. I think a self-challenge of setting to make sure your next story is at least 4 1/2 to 5 pages long will help you flesh out your next fic.

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by SmittyNZ01/29/13

Dem bones...

You've got a solid story outline, now you need to slow it down a little, add some detail, make the transitions more natural, then it'd be 5-star material.

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