I love this series. Keep writing!
I do so Love happy endings. 8)
Time to get the suster involved.!!!
"I have some good porno films". You're a regular casanova.
Please can I Have Mom's address!
Its good add hid sister and let him keep both of them as his sex slave and naked when his father is not around.
Mom may need to start exercising to get the stamina to keep up with her stud of a son in the bedroom.
I like that mom is willing to be his lover, and I hope that he can get his mom to fuck him every day.
A really hot scenerio that was written very graphically and erotic.
Thanks for the read.
The penultimate 'your' in;
""Your getting hard again," Mom said, moving the warm cloth over my crotch."
needs to be a 'you're', as it is a contraction of 'you are'. This sort of error is disruptive and throws me out of the story.
Whenever I see an upset grammar snob, I like to pat them on the head and say "there they're their, its going to be ok"
Since mom knows he is fucking his sister, they need to have a three-way! He sounds stud enough to take care of both women, and just maybe the two women would enjoy each other as well.
A fitting end to this 3 parter, hard fast and stroke reads all through
For a story to have any chance of being good, it must be more thorough, more details and descriptions, and certainly more than fucking for the sake of fucking: In, out, and done!!! Just like that. This story is more like fucking an ugly whore where he just wants to get his jollies, and move to his next chore of the day.
hot fucking, good sex scenes, nice characters thanks
Title says it all. The concept of this story is really hot, it's a classic for a reason, but you need to work on your level of detail, and your dialogue. The sister at one point just saying "I want your cock in my pussy" is unacceptable. Where's the passion where's the lust?
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