All Comments on 'The First Encounter'

by ElleMonroe

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Scotsman69Scotsman69almost 12 years ago
Beautiful

a few writing issues, but you have it. Thank you.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Loved it

Great build up and scenario. Change of narrative tense distracted a bit but the characters felt real enough for the story to work. Thank you for sharing.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago

Can't wait for part 2.

HubeeHubeealmost 12 years ago
A good start

I really would have liked a longer first chapter - but I am curious and excited enought to want to read more

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
More please

More please

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
not a bad tease...

but next time, read through and edit a bit more before posting. Lack of consistency in your tense is a little distracting.

doctorsamdoctorsamalmost 12 years ago
More Please

Your description and style bring me right into the story. Very intense. Looking forward to the next installments.

PaddlrPaddlralmost 12 years ago

Well written; good spelling and grammar along with an intriguing plot line. Looking forward to the next chapter.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
nicely done

waiting for the next (longer maybe?) chapter

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago

Very exciting. Next time read through before posting, there were a few writing errors. But I wait eagerly for the next chapter.

2275jr2275jralmost 12 years ago
smacking your ass get you pussy dripping

wow love this first part of THE FIRST ENCOUNTER

just getting into it now i want more . i can see this being a real hot horny story .

love the writing now do waste time start to write the next part .

secretdesires69secretdesires69almost 11 years ago
Nice!

I loved it! 5 stars!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
good start

one complaint, needs to be teased out longer

bcruel2mebcruel2meover 10 years ago
Hot

I enjoyed the first part of your story and didn't mind the shorter length because it was good for an intro that led quickly to a bit of action.

My one complaint would be that the switch from past to present tense was a little distracting. There were some grammatical things that were the kinds of mistakes that I personally find myself making when I am working quickly.

That being said, I respect anyone who puts a story up here and I really enjoyed yours.

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