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Burning Lust of a Frightening Dark Lover Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous05/24/12

What the hell does 'frighting' mean?

The friggin' title is misspelled. I can only guess that the content will be even worse!

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by Anonymous05/24/12

What a shame.

Your spelling, grammar and punctuation all suck. You constantly use the wrong words or spell the right ones wrongly and comma's seem to be strewn at random through the whole piece.
And it's such a damn shame because the concept is worth so much more. Go take a course in English language and then try again. You've got the imagination, but not yet the tools.

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by Anonymous05/25/12

I like it!

You have imagination and good story telling qualities. Keep it up.

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by cannd05/25/12

It's not necessary to get nasty--Anonymous.
I would say you need to get an editor b/c there are alot of easy errors to fix. But, overall, as an opening chapter, it got my attention. Keep writing.

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by Anonymous05/25/12

Interesting....

Hey, you could use an editor but the concept is good and should make for an interesting story so keep at it. Most people are able to ignore mistakes as they read anyway. As for the high and mighty anonymous critic - I would like to point out that the plural of comma is commas not comma's. Maybe YOU should take and English class, professor.

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