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by Anonymous

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by mrpervy4605/21/12

Another Good One

I was part way finished when I saw your name, pretty good one honey.

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by Silmarillion05/21/12

Good enough

But your grammar really needs some work. Punctuation is off, sentence structure was skewed often times, and the general conversation just kind of turned me off about 1/3 the way through. You have potential with your writing and your story lines. Your biggest problem is getting the writing so that the story just flows along.

Try submitting your work to some of the proof readers listed. And if you don't have it, enlist the assistance of spell check and grammar check in MS Office or some other word processing program.

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by shoeslayer02/21/13

I don't expect much from you Baloney_Pony

Do you not have the balls to write a story?
either you don't like the fetish or the grammar.
I bet you could not write a story and get it posted,
It is easy to trash anothers story when you have
never posted a story.

You are probably a very mean person, not
because you don't like my stories, I don't mind
that you don't like them, I don't expect everyone
to like all my stories

But you know you don't like them and read
them anyways so you can trash them after.
Well go ahead and trash them if that is how
you feel, I don't expect much from you and
chances are, your friends don't either.

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