Good start to the story . I can't wait to read more ,
this will be a wonderful story
I am already looking for chapter 2....lol great start!
So interested in this story chapter 2 cant wait
Looking forward to see what will happen next with this story so please update it soon thanx!!
Very interesting story so far can't wait to read more
Ohh this is going to be good, cant wait to read more so hmmm hurry up!!!
Thanks for the feedback and comments! I love to know what my readers think and I reply to feedback for the most part... KEEP BEING AWESOME!
This was an amazing beginning! More, please?
This is going to be so sexy!!!
I can't wait to see how this one plays out.
If you could see my face you'd think I was a 13 year old girl who just got her first kiss! What a clever clever clever plot. Wow I really enjoyed this and I love Kassidy's character! Sean is such an asshole. Friend or no frend. But hopefully Jackson can make her see she should have a lot more respect for her body. And the fact that hes so much older is so HOT. Ahaha, maybe it's just me. *shrug* Anyway, keep up the good work and keep the posts coming as fast as you have been lol. People will begin to expect them at this frequency ;)
The writing is good, the conflict is there. Tension is building nice and slow.
Too much focus on physical characteristics. Those descriptions slow down the story.
I love this beginning...can wait for more
Wow what an amazing start
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