by EMiamiRiverRat
Even for fantasy lit this is just to rediculous! I stopped reading at less than half way through the story. Find some other endeavour - other than writing this crap!
I found it really funny.
I can see the joke in this.
Good for a one off.
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to grayge oh shut up you twit it was funny, but then again if you want to read something more dramatic try the illiad.
First of all he raped his mother then fed her a line of bullshit, she has to be a dumb twit to believe him.
Then there were other women? Was there something in the water that killed women's brain cells?
I gave it a 3 stars for your fantasy.
Readers take this stuff too serious, it's good to have someone with a sense of humor...these other readers...stop taking things to heart.
You need to go back to the video games you 15 yr.olds play and let the real writers write on this site! Sincewhen is rape considered protection? And you expect the readers to believe ALL the women in your fantasy neighborhood are as STUPID as your mother? Your "story" is a joke!
Nothing wrong with the story from EMiamiRiverRat.
In fact he came up with a new twist to the usual mother/son tale.
Sure he needs a bit more practice but the the fellow has good ideas :)
Good luck with your development as a great story teller over time EMiamiRiverRat.
Outrageous, humorous and erotic plus deffently original.
Fucking her as much as he did, would probably make her addicted to his dick.
Thanks for the read...
Got to admit, this is an excellent story.
It's a new twist on an old subject - excellent work!
Stupid is as stupid does lol
So he cons one dummy and she finds many dummies all meet his grossly off center needs - and now a second generation of inbreeds - damn
Great story! Obv its far-fetched, but i dont think the writer meant this story to be too realistic. Keep up the wirting and youll start making even better stories.
As for everyone else, I agree with the other poster, you really need to chill out. Its a fantasy story. Dont flip if its not perfect.
If adult women were as stupid to fall for that ploy, I would have 300 plus children. LOL
The funny idea of KILLER sperm!!! LOL!!!
I never thought of that one"Killer sperm"? Surely women can't be that stupid! Yet
again you've heard of the term"Stupid Bitches when in heat" OH OH OH ( HORSGASM MAN) YOU KNOW WITH THE POPULATION OF THE EARTH CHANCES ARE THAT THIS IS REALLY DOES/DID HAPPEN ? FREAKING GOOD EH !
Fantastic story!
Love you all! GREG.
OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.
Started out alright, could have used more effort in the middle and end.
Your math has her birthing you at 16, unlikely. The rest is just too ridiculous.