A very nice romance - could have used a bit more buildup, a bit more tension before the release, but very nice. Keep the story moving.
I haven't heard anyone using a condom in ages, and you did, which makes your story someting special. Go ahead , continue with this story, it should be exciting .
I love brother sister love! Especially, when it is written about in a loving and sensitive way. I definitely would like to see sequels. Suggest bringing his sister into his success by Them discovering her talent in songwriting or lyrics. This would make them into a true couple rather than her simply tagging along like. A groupie.
Good first effort. Deserved the 5 I gave it.
I enjoyed reading this story & I hope you will make it a multiple chapter story.
it started good but could have used some more background about them growing up and the parents dying. it also needs more build up between the time they get home to the sex this should have been spread out over days or weeks not hours. they both need to get used to the fact they love each other and not just dive in. as a whole it was good but rushed slow down some and you will get better.
Gave this five stars as an incentive to continue this story and write others. I too really like brother/sister love. It is special.
i agree that she needs to be brought into the group other then as a groupie like follower. if nobady knows her then maybe a name change so they could go public
Better quality than most author's stories. Most rush in with filth words and Bravado.
You make it readable and interesting. It comes on as a normal realization of love between man and woman in real life. Well written. It took Aiden some time to realize his own feelings. Although it is uncommon for brother and sister to fall in love, you manage to make it believable. Good show!
I'm sure many would like your story to be more graphic and sexually descriptive. I have had sex enough that I don't need that. I enjoy stories that make me feel good about the characters. This one did, and I hope you will continue to write.
A breath of fresh air.
Thank you, everyone. :D I'm happy to say that the next chapter will be posted soon, and I'm so glad that many of you like this! Stay tuned.
I really liked the story, and thought it was very touching and could easily happen. It is well written, sensitive and highly erotic. A very good story about the love of a brother and sister. I look forward to reading more like this.
Such an amazing story. Sweet and Loving.
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