All Comments on 'Laura's New World'

Your title doesn't match the name of your main character. You need help with basic punctuation (use of periods or semicolons versus commas). And, you need to better develop the overall plot as well as add detail to the ending. This is more an idea sketch than an actual story.

I'm not going to give it a star rating because it deserves nor more than one as a story, but since it isn't really a story yet, that wouldn't be fair. It has potential as an outline of a story still to be completed.

This is not the story that was submitted to Literotica. It is actually under the title of 'Det Ins Lindsey's drunken fuck'. and in none consent. I apologise, I will resubmit 'Laura's new world' soon, thank you