A sweet read. I really like this story and wish we knew more about how the next few years go for them. I hope they stay together and both get successful. Maybe a sequel? Pretty please with sugar on top?
I wonder how funny Jason's dad would find that his son was one of the goats. People truly can be blind to what they don't want to see. Jason just had to open his eyes as well as his heart and both he and Caleb benefitted from it.
This was a great story. I got a little sidetracked at the beginning remembering my own high school years and the crazy trips which were under-chaperoned by well meaning adults who had no idea how to manage teenagers. It brought back LOL memories.
*THAN* is the word for comparison, *then* indicates what happens next. I think I flinched every time. It detracts from what is otherwise a great read. I'd also like to see a sequel, but please fix the grammar first.
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Anonymous06/21/12
What a sweet story
I'm glad I'm an adult now (well most of the times). High school had its scary moments with mean teenagers, and some of the craziest and scary decisions ever:-)
This was beautiful, errors and all, I hope you have a sequel in store for these boys. I know I'd love that.
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Anonymous06/21/12
I just love your stories. I love your ideas, your characters, the way you write. That's all I wanted to say.
I love what you wrote and the sex was some of the best on here. I wish this wasn't a contest entry as I would really love to hear more. You are one of my favorite writers on here and I am surprised this story isn't rated higher as it is one of your strongest. I have a soft spot for my fave of yours but this one is close 2nd.
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Anonymous06/23/12
I know it's a convenient plot device to have make every single straight person evil, but you should really find some other way to make your story work. This story is great, well written and beautiful, just like all the others. It's just that I know exactly what's going to happen before I read it. A shy and awkward feminine gay guy meets a more confident, less feminine gay guy. The feminine one went through some sort of child abuse. Some "gay bashers" enter the story, along with straight characters that are just plain jerks. The masculine one helps the feminine one with his past and defends him against the bashers. Everything turns out alright in the end. I'd just like to see you change up your formula a bit.
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Anonymous06/23/12
I don't know if you've ever used a hookah before but hookah is designed for smoking shisha (tobacco) only, if you do smoke just weed out of it it'll fuck the entire thing up. It's a minor story flaw, but it irked me while reading.
A number of cliches in the story, but then again, how much of what we read is truly original? Going beyond that, however, and despite a small issue I had with how much detail Jason could see in the dark, what I loved about this is how very real it felt, especially while they're still in the hut. That whirl of emotion, confusion, nerves and pure physical feeling. Very well written!
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Anonymous06/23/12
:)
Loved it! Very sweet. However, you should never ever use vaseline with latex condoms. The vaseline degrades the latex and kind of makes it useless for protecting against STDs.
especially happy endings for sweet/lonely/vulnerable boys with heartbreakingly low expectations. the story flowed quickly and smoothly. it was peppered throughout with some really great descriptive phases - not just during the sex, but i do appreciate how all your sex scenes are so detailed. liked the script motif. great entry, thanks!
I think you had a great set up and a fantastic finished, lots of emotion along with some hot sex. Ignore the lack of originality comments, with the amount of stories on here there is NEVER any true originality and you did a fantastic job of breathing new life into some of the more usual theme lines. Being able to do that is real talent and I thought it was a great read... going to be checking out more of your stuff!
Good luck in the contest!
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Anonymous06/25/12
Awesome story~
Very heartfelt and believable characters. . . lovely soft romance feel. . . and the steaminess factor was right on point :) Oh, and I loved the attention to sensory details, as it really drew the reader (a female in my case) in! Well done!
I was looking for something hot to read and found this. I don't normally read gay porn as it never seems to get me off but the title intrigued me so I clicked on it. I'm so glad I did. I was quickly drawn in by the descriptive scenes and the oh so believable characters. This story, has enough romance to make me sigh, and enough passion to make me pant. An instant favorite and one I'll read again. Best of luck in the contest!
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Anonymous10/09/12
Beautiful
Beautiful. Perhaps you're best work and I think one of the best gay romances on the site. Thanks for writing this.
I'm just so disappointed that Tim and the others didn't get in trouble for this. I couldn't even enjoy the rest of the story because I felt so furious on behalf of the two main characters!
But I agree with anon, I would have enjoyed it even more had the ignorant asshole bullie's had been punished severly, some people really do deserve to die. Or even better, put inprison and become some giant bubba's bitch and oh yes, bubba would have a 12inch dick haha, DAMN BUBBA
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Anonymous04/08/13
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Did they end up together? I would have liked to know
I have read this story three times so I decided to leave a comment, I really loved it and iIhope that there will be a sequel and the others get into trouble, but I won't let that deter me from enjoying this wonderful story of Caleb and Jason falling in love, please write a sequel for these two they deserve to have a bright future full of Friendship, Trust, and Lots of Love.
English
Awe
9babThat was a very charming story.
As usual brilliant
Very compelling and charming I hope they both become millionaires and Tim a dust catcher... what competition by the way so I can vote for you
great read!
Excellent as always. Best of luck with the contest.
Great Story
A sweet read. I really like this story and wish we knew more about how the next few years go for them. I hope they stay together and both get successful. Maybe a sequel? Pretty please with sugar on top?
I wonder how funny Jason's dad would find that his son was one of the goats. People truly can be blind to what they don't want to see. Jason just had to open his eyes as well as his heart and both he and Caleb benefitted from it.
Wellwritten
This was a great story. I got a little sidetracked at the beginning remembering my own high school years and the crazy trips which were under-chaperoned by well meaning adults who had no idea how to manage teenagers. It brought back LOL memories.
Uh, sequel? PLEASE?!
very cute story, but...
*THAN* is the word for comparison, *then* indicates what happens next. I think I flinched every time. It detracts from what is otherwise a great read. I'd also like to see a sequel, but please fix the grammar first.
What a sweet story
I'm glad I'm an adult now (well most of the times). High school had its scary moments with mean teenagers, and some of the craziest and scary decisions ever:-)
This was beautiful, errors and all, I hope you have a sequel in store for these boys. I know I'd love that.
I just love your stories. I love your ideas, your characters, the way you write. That's all I wanted to say.
5 from me once again
I love what you wrote and the sex was some of the best on here. I wish this wasn't a contest entry as I would really love to hear more. You are one of my favorite writers on here and I am surprised this story isn't rated higher as it is one of your strongest. I have a soft spot for my fave of yours but this one is close 2nd.
I know it's a convenient plot device to have make every single straight person evil, but you should really find some other way to make your story work. This story is great, well written and beautiful, just like all the others. It's just that I know exactly what's going to happen before I read it. A shy and awkward feminine gay guy meets a more confident, less feminine gay guy. The feminine one went through some sort of child abuse. Some "gay bashers" enter the story, along with straight characters that are just plain jerks. The masculine one helps the feminine one with his past and defends him against the bashers. Everything turns out alright in the end. I'd just like to see you change up your formula a bit.
I don't know if you've ever used a hookah before but hookah is designed for smoking shisha (tobacco) only, if you do smoke just weed out of it it'll fuck the entire thing up. It's a minor story flaw, but it irked me while reading.
Evocative...
A number of cliches in the story, but then again, how much of what we read is truly original? Going beyond that, however, and despite a small issue I had with how much detail Jason could see in the dark, what I loved about this is how very real it felt, especially while they're still in the hut. That whirl of emotion, confusion, nerves and pure physical feeling. Very well written!
:)
Loved it! Very sweet. However, you should never ever use vaseline with latex condoms. The vaseline degrades the latex and kind of makes it useless for protecting against STDs.
i so love happy endings
especially happy endings for sweet/lonely/vulnerable boys with heartbreakingly low expectations. the story flowed quickly and smoothly. it was peppered throughout with some really great descriptive phases - not just during the sex, but i do appreciate how all your sex scenes are so detailed. liked the script motif. great entry, thanks!
Lovely
I think you had a great set up and a fantastic finished, lots of emotion along with some hot sex. Ignore the lack of originality comments, with the amount of stories on here there is NEVER any true originality and you did a fantastic job of breathing new life into some of the more usual theme lines. Being able to do that is real talent and I thought it was a great read... going to be checking out more of your stuff!
Good luck in the contest!
Awesome story~
Very heartfelt and believable characters. . . lovely soft romance feel. . . and the steaminess factor was right on point :) Oh, and I loved the attention to sensory details, as it really drew the reader (a female in my case) in! Well done!
tu eres super XD
tus historias siempre me gustan Jajaja sigue asi!
Incredibly impressed
I was looking for something hot to read and found this. I don't normally read gay porn as it never seems to get me off but the title intrigued me so I clicked on it. I'm so glad I did. I was quickly drawn in by the descriptive scenes and the oh so believable characters. This story, has enough romance to make me sigh, and enough passion to make me pant. An instant favorite and one I'll read again. Best of luck in the contest!
Beautiful
Beautiful. Perhaps you're best work and I think one of the best gay romances on the site. Thanks for writing this.
Awesome story!
:)
Furious
I'm just so disappointed that Tim and the others didn't get in trouble for this. I couldn't even enjoy the rest of the story because I felt so furious on behalf of the two main characters!
Good story
But I agree with anon, I would have enjoyed it even more had the ignorant asshole bullie's had been punished severly, some people really do deserve to die. Or even better, put inprison and become some giant bubba's bitch and oh yes, bubba would have a 12inch dick haha, DAMN BUBBA
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Did they end up together? I would have liked to know
Just Great!
I have read this story three times so I decided to leave a comment, I really loved it and iIhope that there will be a sequel and the others get into trouble, but I won't let that deter me from enjoying this wonderful story of Caleb and Jason falling in love, please write a sequel for these two they deserve to have a bright future full of Friendship, Trust, and Lots of Love.
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