story, great so far but you need an editor
This started the new years off right! Great start can't wait to dig into more of this story.
You had all the makings of an interesting story 7 months ago, and I like the ideas, but your writing is only a little better. How many times can people say get an editor? We're not being petty, you really really need one.
The story is good, but there are so many grammatical errors that they detract from what I'm reading. There are spelling errors, grammar errors, changing between tenses. Please, get an editor before submitting the next chapter. Thank you.
so it wont happen again. forgive me viewers
this is more like a noncon story and so far he has done nothing but order her around and use her virgin status to bend her to his will.
I Loooooooooove it. I want a John in my life lol. This story is hot keep on with the updates
Enjoying the story. So ready for another update!
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