All Comments on 'I Haven't Seen You In Years Ch. 04'

Your paragraphs are a bit too long the story would read much easier if you broke them up and separated dialog from the rest of the narrative.

You turned a possibly good story into a dream sequence????

Does it bother you that much that its a dream?

The sub title/description is a little vague, or is it misleading, here.

My first thought was "How will she know she will be in love with him 8 years from now and why is that important to this story.

Then I realized you meant after they had been separated for 8 years. I have not read the story yet, hope the rest is free of ambiguous statements.

"A woman runs into the boy she was in love with, after 8 years." is worded a little better.

Also we have a woman and a boy, might it not be better to refer to them in same age terminology?

You have created a verbal optical illusion.