I know it's fantasy , but c'mon ! A tube top and it's snowing? Oh and the tank top on the married woman in the train station too ! Gimme a break !
not bad for the first part and i hope you finish it. I will love for him to get her in bed.
way too rushed and no real background, he's only home a few hours and he's trying to fuck his sister that he hasn't seen in three years. this needs a rewrite and a good editor. this reads like it should be chapter two of a series not a stand alone story. you need to tell us why he hasn't been back and why his sister is trying to seduce him. what was thier relationship like before he left for college? if his parents ignored them growingup why is his mom so insistant he go to the hotel?
very hot you should finish this one I like that the way things are going anything can happen including various family members
I'll be glad when he fills his sister's pussy with his big cock. Perhaps she will want to move back with him when he leaves and they can live together.
Thanks for the read.
dude with the c'mon comment i laugh hard at that lol swimming in the dead of winter lol.but it his/her first story so....-BG
to get us started. Good start to what could be an excellent next chapter.
As for the mook who said something stupid about swimming in the dead of winter - ever hear of an indoor pool? Pay no attention to fools.
Well paced and interesting.
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