All Comments on 'Better Ch. 02'

"Professional media writer aspriring to conquer the world of erotic fiction" from your bio.

You have to be fucking kidding! You NEED an editor, I can't read any more of your writing, is English a second language for you? That's how it comes across.

It reads fine to me.

very creative writer

fun to read

sometimes it is difficult for a good writer to re-read enough to catch all of the subtle errors

in my opinion anonymous opinions are cowardly

Good imagery and an interesting plot. Very descriptive sex scenes--I like it. Looking forward to the next chapter.

I am loving the raw sex and the erotic images of the gushing wetness.