Talk about being the fly on the wall!
Outstanding work. a little short, but oh so good.
A sequel please!
This story was virtually unreadable. What were you trying to convey?
Good job. VERY readable. The climax was a little dissapointing but this would make a great begining to a longer piece.
Don't know what you mean by unreadable. I could feel it, smell, taste it. That's exactly the way it happened, sounded, felt like. Only difference, it started on a hotel elevator ...
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