A nice, well-told story; I look forward to seeing where it will lead in subsequent chapters. As a first story, at least under this name, it is really very good.
I thought this was well-written. A couple of typos (eg. "She realized my nipples") but other than that it flowed pretty well. I think there's potential to take this further - the characters could do with more fleshing out, and so on - but it also works quite well as a simple stand-alone short.
Thank you for continuum ping this in a second part!
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Anonymous08/05/12
Nice beginning!!!
Looking forward to the continuing story. Already posted, I know. A wise woman understands and uses her husbands sexual turn-ons. Being offended and combative just weakens a relationship. Well worth the read.
This looks very promising.
A nice, well-told story; I look forward to seeing where it will lead in subsequent chapters. As a first story, at least under this name, it is really very good.
Thank you for posting.
Nicely done
I thought this was well-written. A couple of typos (eg. "She realized my nipples") but other than that it flowed pretty well. I think there's potential to take this further - the characters could do with more fleshing out, and so on - but it also works quite well as a simple stand-alone short.
All in all, nicely done and happy writing!
Very Nice!
Very nice indeed, and I'm hoping there's more story here, but also hoping it keeps the same loving tone.
I hope there is more to cum!
Great story! I truly hope there is more to cum from this series!
Great writing - keep up the great work!
Well written
Very nice story; looking forward to the next installment. Plenty of room for further twists along the way.
Loved the story. Can't wait to see what else she and her cousin have planned for him.
she created one great fantasy!
nice writing, good plot and a beautiful fantasy. Like this story expanded.
when a guy goes out like this, he is a perfect for a slave!
Thanks
Thank you for continuum ping this in a second part!
Nice beginning!!!
Looking forward to the continuing story. Already posted, I know. A wise woman understands and uses her husbands sexual turn-ons. Being offended and combative just weakens a relationship. Well worth the read.
That was hot. It would have been hotter of he had been forced to eat his own cum after Amy fucked him.
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