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She Creates the Fantasy

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous07/22/12

This looks very promising.

A nice, well-told story; I look forward to seeing where it will lead in subsequent chapters. As a first story, at least under this name, it is really very good.

Thank you for posting.

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by kuellar07/22/12

Nicely done

I thought this was well-written. A couple of typos (eg. "She realized my nipples") but other than that it flowed pretty well. I think there's potential to take this further - the characters could do with more fleshing out, and so on - but it also works quite well as a simple stand-alone short.

All in all, nicely done and happy writing!

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by 1Martiniman07/22/12

Very Nice!

Very nice indeed, and I'm hoping there's more story here, but also hoping it keeps the same loving tone.

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by Bigfoot696907/22/12

I hope there is more to cum!

Great story! I truly hope there is more to cum from this series!

Great writing - keep up the great work!

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by Paddlr07/22/12

Well written

Very nice story; looking forward to the next installment. Plenty of room for further twists along the way.

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by gman6907/22/12

Loved the story. Can't wait to see what else she and her cousin have planned for him.

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by Anonymous07/26/12

she created one great fantasy!

nice writing, good plot and a beautiful fantasy. Like this story expanded.
when a guy goes out like this, he is a perfect for a slave!

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by Geneseepaws07/27/12

Thanks

Thank you for continuum ping this in a second part!

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by Anonymous08/05/12

Nice beginning!!!

Looking forward to the continuing story. Already posted, I know. A wise woman understands and uses her husbands sexual turn-ons. Being offended and combative just weakens a relationship. Well worth the read.

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by Justlooking443510/24/12

That was hot. It would have been hotter of he had been forced to eat his own cum after Amy fucked him.

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by Anonymous06/17/13

magic deams reality

wonderful lively, almost possible tale.nice plot.
can easily be added to.well done.

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by Dicax07/10/13

Good different

I really enjoyed the actual love in the tone of the piece. That the woman actually loves the man and is not using him as a sex slave. It felt more real I think. It sounds like there could be a part two!

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