All Comments on 'Dealing with the Loss'

You built the suspense well.

Thanks Don

what happened? Was that the end of it? I hope not.

shuttlepilot

Nice storyline but needs a little more developement. It jumps form dinner conversation (verbal foreplay) to pinning her against a door. How did they get from Point A to Point B? Needs a paragraph or two more detail. Also the ending needs work. It seems that they get along so well that the story needs to at least suggest that they will continue their "arrangement".

Actually, this was submitted long before I would have liked. Look for at least one edited version in the future maybe more. For those looking for them to get together and become a happy couple etc. I've no plans for that.

Very entertaining read. To bad the author stop submitting to this site?