All Comments on 'Strip Searching Sister Girl'

seriously? i know it's porn but god damn it, it's also writing.

Get an editor. It will help.

Alittle editing and keep going with this story!

And I have a hard time getting my stories on here because of bad punctuation. Gee wiz......

I am intrigued but you really need to check spelling, etc.

I want to know more about the bank heist.

No i don't edit and anyone whose read anything I've posted on here probably knows that..it's the one common comment. I'm not going to either. I tell great stories and have read other people stories online and have several mistakes that few people point out. You want my editted version u will have to buy them. I use literotica.com as a test to see how many views I get and rather people actually enjoyed the story.

I tried to read it objectively. But honestly could not get pass the horrible grammar. It was too painful to try to read.

While all my stories are raw and no I don't really proof read them. I get inspired I write and post. WHen i had my first profile on here. I use to be concern about proof reading until I wrote a story that was getting great reviews, 4 and 5 stars and a few white haters started putting zero's and nit picking about some grammar flaws. So i realize I wrote 4 and 5 star stories put there would always be people that brought my rating down because of the content of my stories. So i'm not concern about it. I get thousands of views, and favorited by readers..that's what I'm concerned about and people encouraging me to continue stories. which i rarely do on here. I have complete stories I will be releasing that will be edited but it will be published and then people can pay me for the time it takes to go through my stories and correct a misspelling here or there....remember y'all this is free....u get what u pay for

seriously I don't. If u have constructive things to say. I'll listen. But I have no love for anonymous comments. If its' quote in quote painful to read then don't why bother to comment. I've read it. Several other people have read it. Could it be my Ebonics..could be? But don't get it twisted. I attended the University of Missouri-Columbia. College grad. Chemistry degree. and I don't hide under Anonymous comments

I have no problem with non-consent or rough sex, but this piece of sh@t story was just stereotypes thrown in with scene about blow-jobs. Seriously?!

In case you're wondering, i'm a black woman who also holds a degree, it's not just white people who find your bullshit story offensive.

I liked it :) wishing I was delores ;)

Goodness, I really like non-consent stories, and I love interracial stories,,,but this...I mean come on, these stereotypes are ridiculous, this story was completely offensive and crude, I don't even know what you were going for here, I really tried to get into this story, it had so much going it for it: interracial, non consent, cops, rough sex but then you just filled it to the brim with useless stereotypes and prejudice that it loses and semblance of quality. I'm sorry to give such a harsh review, but as a young black female these stories just get to be ...ugh...I mean Id like to be able to read a story without having to put up with mind numbing ignorance and idiotic stereotypes. you have the right to write what you want of course, but come on man...be a little more tasteful about it

I thought it was so hot! Ignore the haters please write more

Thank Everybody for there comments. I've rather enjoyed them. Keep reading and writing ladies and gentlemen. I will with more on the way!

Please learn how to use proper grammar. Also, it's "officer" not "office". And other than that, it was still an awful story.

Where's the rest?

if it was the dialog would give me stage four cancer

But it ends just before things get interesting; fuck oral, I want them to fill her womb. Breed her. Maker her fat with child.

I kept reading hoping it would get better. Sadly, it did not.