All Comments on 'A Cumslut is Born Ch. 01'

by Julian0682

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60andhorny60andhornyover 11 years ago
exciting

Hope there is more to cum.

bluesky496bluesky496over 11 years ago

oh my god i wish i was Julian ,i was so horny reading this ,i must read more please .

let us have the next chapter soon please.x

tturtle50tturtle50over 11 years ago
Almost!

That was almost a dream cum true! Just can't afford that! Thanks more please!

Julian0682Julian0682over 11 years agoAuthor
Thanks!

Thanks for the feedback! Chapter 2 is being approved still, and I am writing chapter 3.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago

Question - why are you consistently referring to the shemales in your writing as males "he", "him", "his", etc. ??

For most people who read these stories, we refer to transexuals and shemales as women. Beautiful and in some cases fantastical ladies, who happen to be equipped with penis and testicles. Your writing is effective but this part really kills it for me in a mental sense because when I think he, I am automatically thinking something more like a p/t transvestite or a cross-dresser. Again, we're talking fantasy here.

If you fix this, I think the mental images flow together much smoother. I don't have an account here, so this is under anonymous but I'm on the site regularly, I assure you.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
he is very disrespectful

you should change the he to she. SHE is male-to-female Transgender.

bobbie

TransfixedTransfixedover 11 years ago
Gendered pronouns.

Seriously, Tonya should, most likely, be referred to as 'she'. While some transgendered folk might prefer their 'birth' pronoun, I am sure that most prefer the pronoun of their 'new' gender.

cock_worshipperrcock_worshipperrover 11 years ago

I loved these stories! I love your beautiful descriptions of a nasty little cumslut finally worshiping his first cock and becoming a slave to its power! Very hot!

VFPANTIES69VFPANTIES69over 10 years ago
cock and cum

I would love to suck your cock and drink your cum

CanadianMCanadianMover 9 years ago
Good one..

Well done.. captured the emotions

DarkChocolateGoddessDarkChocolateGoddessabout 9 years ago
A small tip

Most transgendered (male to females) would not like being called "he" or "him".

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago
First Person Viewpoint

Julian, this story would have been much stronger if you had written it in the first person rather than in the third person.

Claudia69Claudia69about 3 years ago
Yummy Cum!!!

I love a mouth full of CUM!! Good Story!!!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 months ago

Good Story I have never been with a beautiful shemale,It is a fantasy of mine.Thats my idea of a perfect woman that has nice

tits and a big juicy cock

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