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These Wolves Alone Ch. 03

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by Anonymous08/07/12

time frame

last chapter Devin was 10 and able to have mental flashbacks or daydreams. Now he is thinking in the past and jumping on a motorcycle?
Give us more titles. The 'flashback' helped, but how about 'ten years later' or 'present day' to better guide your reader. I strongly recommend you get in contact with an editor. The first chapter started off decently so there is hope here. Also, I would go back and edit previous chapters for the experience and to make the process of future stories much more enjoyable for your editor and for yourself. Good luck!

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