by leanne2k
Good attempt... Although the story telling part and the hot tub part could be improved...
It's rough and needs a good deal of but I read it all the way through. There is certainly talent there you just have to take your time and explore it a little more.
I did not make it all the way through. Like rubbing your fingers over rough wood and getting splinters. The writer displays almost no sensitivity, misuses words (for instance, "euphoria") and writes "excepted" when it should be "accepted". This story needed an editor bigtime. For the "author" to submit it in its unpolished condition is a sad commentary on her standards.