All Comments on 'The Massage'

I highly suggest you use someone else to proofread your story before submitting it.

but, there are a few grammatical errors that kinda make it jar me out of it slightly. Nothing too major, just missing commas and misused words is all. :)

While the story is somewhat stimulating, the grammar is incredibly distracting. Sorry, but you can't go from "she WENT into the room" to "she LOOKS around". Past tense or present tense. Pick one. Either way, this story needs some editing, as the grammar problems got in the way of my full enjoyment.

This is one HOT story - WOW !! Good build up and you have some opportunities to write a few added chapters about Jay and Melinda. Thanks !

You lost me a couple of paragraphs in when you lost your train of thought. I have a regular massage myself and I can tell you when I am on the table and the girl walks in I certainly can't look into her eyes or see her arms when I'm lying FACE DOWN with my head in the hollow. Think about what you're doing.

THANKS