by SatansMistres
O.K. read but you need to clean up the grammar. Sentences are all run-on and difficult to follow.
There seems to be a rash of stories that read like they were written in ten minutes or less. The story lacks any emotion or excitement. If you're going to write something what want other to enjoy reading, then put a little work and thought into it. Writing is more than typing words.
Needs editing.
Time line!
Mascara can't run if daughter took mom by hair from shower.
Mom can't plead, scream or talk with ball gag in mouth. Can only make noise.
Mom's tits can't be struck by cane if hands and ankles sre attached to spreader bar. Etc.
This is Mom's first time; how is she suppose to know she has to ask permission to cum.
I don't think she could even cum with the mental anguish of being assaulted by her own daughter.
Need to be trained properly to hold off orgasm till pemission given. A new slave-her first session would not have that skill yet.
A cane; especially to the nipples and clit is too extreme to such a new slave. Especially an elderly or mature woman as Mom.
Other than that good story!
Keep writing!
MORE STRAP-ON!!!!!!
Drag your Mother straight from the shower OK but later you say as tears rolled down her cheek making mascara run WHAT MASCARA SHE HAD JUST HAD SHOWER & IF IT WAS WATERPROOF THEN TEARS WOULD NOT MAKE IT RUN EITHER
Brfore this story I had one where mother's became mistress of her own mother,it was also good but today I can say it is much better than that story even we can say this is wonderful,i adjudicate minutes after minutes
Thanks for this
Obviously English is your second language and you don't own a grammar checker.