by Darkinside
But too short. Embellishment needed, sure one pissed on her, but how many of "them" had cum on her and her hair?
Finally, who was she, by age, and her status ( married, single), and how had this desire developed.
Thanks Don
she will self destruck .. heading for a bad ending
I disagree that we need more detail. It's a vignette, a scene from a life. Why do you need more. So you can hate her & despise her more?
You have a gifted mind. A writer so keenly aware of how people driven to debase themselves think and rationalize is a rare person.
This was a short piece of fiction but enjoyable just the same.
Feels like you read a different story, and felt completed to call the author names. Or maybe you are a name-caller by nature, and that will be your contribution to the world.
I thought it was a sharp insight to a moment in a persons life, on the edge between wanting and fear of wanting. Well done.
Succinct, biting, well written story of a drive home. I liked that she was sober this time. Thank you for your efforts, Darkinside!