no one has been moved enough to comment.
I don't usually vote or comment on stories, but when I read this story was for a contest, I just had to vote in support and leave a comment to let you know how much I enjoyed it.
How again is this story supposed to "move" a reader, AirRichard? It well-written enough, but it's essentially a string of sex scenes that haven't been set up as plausible and has practically no storyline. What's the story issue? How have the characters developed or resolved anything? Where's the drama or tension? Pretty Literotica run of the mill for a competitive contest. Not terrible, though, for the general stroke file.
Enjoyed reading your story. Sun, water, passion, love for an entire day. Doesn't get much better than that.
This woman is a writer!!
If the truth be told, I consider myself a good story teller. My editors make me a good writer.
Can’t wait for the sequel to find out what kind of extramarital dalliances Woody gets involved in. -Ed
Thanks for stopping by to visit me. You guys stick together, don't you? You want to know who whets his willie but I'd rather portray who plumbs my pussy. ;) They're my stories after all. You want the male POV, read his stories. Actually, my previous story was about him fucking the maid, Leilani, and I know the FFM scene gets your juices flowing. Want some Kleenex?
It was a good story... but i would have like a bit more to the story a bit less to the bump and grind. Any 'one' of the what... eight or nine sex scenes would have been good for what happened for each half of a day. This poor girl would be walking bowlegged for a week. She might be happy, but she wont be sitting down any time soon.
Loved some of the lines you used. A cat in a sewing basket, cashing the sex coupon. You are a very good writer, now it's time to be better than that. Slow you pacing. I felt more exhausted than she would have been.Lol
Sex is the easy sell, the story is the hard one. You're good... now be better than good.
I gave you a four
You managed to express your disappointment while complimenting me from top to bottom - that's a fine talent you have, too. I could argue about being sore from evening - morning - afternoon - midnight sex (I've done sex spaced out like that without soreness.) However, I can't deny there's too much sex. I went for an over-the-top sex-capade and it pleased some readers. Like you, I don't feel this was my best work. Have you read my Leilani story?
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Walking bowlegged for a week with that much sex everyday for a week? Haha.. No way. That's not nearly enough sex in a day for that to happen. I know a few prostitutes who do it all day and just about everyday. They seem to walk just fine to me.
Anyway, this was great, Sandra. Your sex-capades sure pleased me. :) I read your Leilani story but I have to say, I liked this one better. I laughed out loud when reading that one bit where Woody made a comment about the dressing room smelling like sex.
Thanks for the read! :)
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