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A Working Holiday

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous08/23/12

Wrong category

Definitely not a LW story.

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by Greyhair6108/23/12

Interesting

Well written, at times fascinating. But no, it is not a "Loving Wives" story. I'm not sure where to put it, but it's in the wrong category here.

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by Anonymous08/23/12

Loving Wives?

No Well written but not LW's.

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by Harddaysknight08/23/12

Interesting.

It may yet become a Loving Wives story. I'm anxious to see where this leads.

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by Scotsman6908/23/12

Never mind quibbling

about categories. It's a lovely tale, well-told, and that's what counts.

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by Lickideesplit08/23/12

Fantasy/SciFi

Where is the 'wife?' Right now, it looks like it's our 'hero!' As a goddess, this might be classified as Non-Human, but the Magic Zephyr which took his map puts it more clearly in the Fantasy group. Despite the hard thing willingly'' in his butt, it is NOT 'Gay!'

Nice story, per se, but really needs to be moved to proper classification!

Will NOT rate in this section of LIT!!!
(It is a '1' as an LW tale, but it is much better than that!)

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by Anonymous08/23/12

Need POS Catagory

Literotica should have a Piece Of Shit catagory for this, that's all it is, is a PIECE OF CRAP

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by JonTaylor08/23/12

Ouch

You write very well. Of course, you know her last line should be "to whom," but it would have been a little awkward, right? Enjoyed.

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by LordSlamdawgg08/23/12

Well this was ... different

I agree with the category quibbling but the author has style. A little teaking & transposing Pura Dei could have been one of those 'Real Housewives'. This would have been one of the more amusing episodes.

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by rjordan08/23/12

Just a wonderful surprise

Doesn't fit LW. OK, doesn't really fit BDSM either. Or SciFi/Fantasy. It doesn't fit ANYTHING. What shall we do? What shall we do?

Who the hell cares. This is a beautifully written, surprising, tantalizing tale. I probably never would have found it if it hadn't been "miscategorized".

Made my whole day, severinrossetti.

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by chytown08/23/12

Thanks**

For the read.

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by digdaddyrich08/23/12

Curiously interesting

Although not loving wives material as of yet, I am interested to know where the story is leading.

Seems as if the young stud has got himself into some sort of cult, and the use of sexual pleasure is one of the cult's tools for making people do what is expected of them.

Thanks for the read.

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by Remain_in_shadow08/23/12

I don't expect a part two

The story feels complete and self contained. Good, story, well told; real storytelling, lilting dialect and all. No category would be a great fit, LW among the worst.

Really well done, thanks for posting. Nice to read a gem once in a while

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by BTTap08/23/12

Uhmmmm....

That was different! Surprising, strange, original and well-written....
Quite a way to kick off a marriage! BDSM foot worship and anal play on a first date. I hate to think what the honeymoon will be like.
More uncomfortable than erotic to me (and the hero?), but what the hell? Different strokes and all that.
I guess this fits into a dark and mostly hidden corner of the large tent that is the LW category.

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by severinrossetti08/26/12

oops!

a 'slip of the finger' dropped this into the wrong category! Sorry!

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