All Comments on 'My Daughter, The Exhibitionist Ch. 02'

A love story really but nicely erotic.

Another 5 star effort by this prolific writer.

There are many men who like small tits. Women can be confident and if find less endowed man it is perfect match

I don't like the informal wording. I find it distracting (distractin'). But I liked the story line.

The style of dialogue that I have used in this story is something not frequently seen in the stories on this site. It is a style that tries to imbue some flavor to the personality of the characters. However, I am receptive to, and responsive to, feedback from readers and I will abandon this experiment with the conclusion that it was not a great success . . . unless I get subsequent feedback from other readers who state that they really enjoyed the change of style. STF

I for one am quite happy with your dialogue style.

All it takes is a little relaxing and imagination.

I'll admit I didn't notice till some of the critics raised the point.

Lisa's such a succulent lil number; wish she were here with me right now!

In regards to Dialect; please be adventuresome, try street slang, Texas drawls, Southern Twangs, whatever. It's your story and these plot changes can help set the mood for where events are taking place. I noticed the changes and just adapted with em.

DKP

Seriously, that was a great story, awfully told. The accent and dialect that you attempted to portray here is obvious, but you really need to have an excellent ear and technical skill to pull it off. These can be developed, but I'm not sure that you have either at this time.

Virtually all of the speech was unbelievable because of the seemingly arbitrary implementation of their word choice and accent.

Here is my story. I'm American and I have a filipina wife and step daughter. Recently I've found out my 18 year old filipina step daughter has been spying on me showering and masturbating. She has been caught trying to see me change. She wants my cock. She has done everything but throw herself at me including masturbating loudly when I'm in the house. She checks me out and she knows I check her out. She is shy

, introvert and a virgin so I would be so honored to take her virginity. She gets me so horny because she is tall and then and has a great ass. A d she does have the cutest small titties. I am not into big ones so much and implants are a total turn off.

I never thought in a million years I would be in this position. But I am. I have dreams of letting her have my thick but average length cock and filling every inch of her pussy with my cock. And I would love to fill her pussy with my seed. My god I'm so horny for her writing this. I've never felt this way with another woman before.

Ugh I just can’t read any more of your stories. While good, your propensity for dropping your “g” for a “ ‘ “ is so annoying. We often talk that way but we don’t read that way. Try using it sparingly, not every sentence.

ignore the haters... Your writin' is freakin' awesome!

and i agree - ignore the haters. but PLEASE - add another chapter or 2 to this story. its 5 stars - but i'd love to read about the next chapter in their lives!

Your use of abbreviations is detracting from your story. You are an adult writing for an adult audience and should write on an adult level. I would have given you 5 stars had you not abbreviated so much. I also didn’t bother to read any more of your stories because I didn’t want to see all the apostrophes. I imagine all your stories were good but will never find out. Good luck.

That was an absolutely amazing story. I would love to read the next chapter if you continue it.

Sweat i loved your story . There is nothing so precious as

unbridled love .