All Comments on 'Wolf at Heart Ch. 01'

good opening. Looking forward to reading more :)

Its a little rushed and you need an editor who would help with spelling and structure... given that not too bad a start.

Like Pheonixbreez said, an editor and adding a little more description would help build this.

looking forward to more.

I love the longer stories. I hope to see many more chapters. I do agree that this first chapter seems a little rushed. But maybe that's just to get catch our interest.. good luck to you.. smiling

Good start, don't make us wait too long for the next installment well done.

Your story has potential and needs an editor to deal with the grammar mistakes that always show up in these things. I for one am so drawn up when I write I don't even see a lot of my mistakes but an editor will catch those for you

Uriziel

on your first submission. And you are taking on not just a story but a story w/chapters in it. I wish this chapter had been a bit longer but I still put it in my Favs because I think you and your story show potential. And while finding an editor is always helpful in the mean time you might try walking away from your story for an hour or so and then rereading w/a fresh pair of eyes. I will be watching for chapter 2 and wish you luck w/not just this story but anything you write....

I'm already drawn in and can't wait for the chapters to follow!

It's a good start. You have got to add more...please.

I know that being your first time your chapters may be a bit short,but longer ones will be nice soon,A good start,keep up the good work,Hope to be reading you for a while.