All Comments on 'We Need to Stop This'

Ah, but how will it end?

Nicely done, you draw out the emotions of both of them beautifully.

plz continue love it -BG

Lovely beginning.

I thought your story was well written and has a great lead up. I was a little let down by the climax of your story only being three lines. I hope this is just the first chapter. It was a good story none the less.

Brandie69, I really don't think this erotic story could have been written any better. Usually, I prefer more sex details but in this case less was oh so much more. Readers will be clamoring for a sequel but you already wrote just the perfect ending.

No, you don't need to stop this, you heed to finish this...

This is very well done. The writing is superb, it flows smoothly and the ending is flawless. It is complete in itself and yet could be expanded if the writer wished.

Exquisite writing from the perfectly constructed four-paragraph intro to an ending that takes the character where we hoped she might go, but not graphically so (if that makes sense).

I really do love this writing style. It oozes intimacy in such a relaxed and flowing manner. And it even pauses to make us smile -- "A girl can't close her eyes around here without somebody masturbating." "And all of the thinking about groceries and housework that I could muster couldn't help them subside." (It's baseball for us guys, of course.)

There's a sweetness to this prose, yet an utter frankness of clarity that cuts right to the bone. We "know" this woman exists, and we "know" exactly how she feels about what's happening. And it's all perfectly plausible.

Thanks, Brandie69, my go-to author at Literotica.

this one seeems to be true, if not it is somewhere in this world i am sure

so great when a mother and son cn truely make love with each other, i know many moms must be and afraid to tell, and really the sons do not get on here and tell either

I'm truly overwhelmed by all of your kind comments.

I don't think this character would have gotten into all of the slippery details of the lovemaking, or the self-loving, for that matter.

And as I've told several readers already privately, this is only the beginning of a much more involved story.

Thanks again, so much, all of you :)

B

Don't leave me hanging! More please!

It has the familiar moral tug of war,but no real life. Maybe possible future chapters will improve.

find something particularly realistic or vivid, while others find "no real life" in it?

B

Good one B

I had to delete your comment because of the email address. I did appreciate it, though. Here's what you wrote, except for the no-no part :)

B

Good Start

09/08/12 By: Rawmaster50

Yes another horny reader requesting more. I am glad this is only the start of a longer more involved story. Stopping where you did ensures that the next chapter will be read. Loved it gave it 5 stars and hope to read more.

super bad way to end,

now i like a tease as much as the next person but that was a tease from start to finish

Thanks for posting such a lovely story. You say you plan to add to it but if it were mine I'd be inclined to leave it as is. Pete.

toyou to say, petertowers. I have a fairly complicated plot in mind for this, but I intend to post it as a series of self-contained vignettes. Overall, it's a little bit whimsical, and I hope at the least you'll be surprised when the threads finally come back together. :)

Thank you, again.

B

...You just know how to get me going, huh? Wonderful start. I love that you're not just a one-and-done writer and take the time to build to climax...it's more enjoyable that way ;-)

The story brought out the turmoil she was feeling and how sexually frustrated she was feeling.

I hope to see more soon.

Thanks for the read.

This was a very good start, and I hope you will follow through on further episodes. Sometimes these incest stories are in poor taste and unrealistic, but this one isn't like that. You've built a good foundation. I can't wait to see how it unfolds. Rick

I like that this story has a slow build up and that actually makes it much more believable. My only problem is that the sequence of events was not clearly explained. How much time took place over this story? I recognized a few days at least but to really show the depth of the emotions each are going through a clear time line would be nice. Great story though keep it up

I'd love to see where this goes!

To variabledark, the timeline is intentionally a little bit vague. You will see if you go back through the story there are several places where words describing the passage of time are chosen, and I assure you they were chosen carefully at the time of writing, to leave a few things to your own imagination.

What length of time do you think would make the story work? It might be different for you than for me.

As for me, I would think this would take about half a summer, from the first poolside scene to the last one in bed. But this author didn't want to impose an exact date.

B

Excellent build up and tension for the mother as she fights the turmoil in herself. I look forward to the next chapters.

This was a totally boring waste of time.

Why not finish the story with something mind-boggling.

No, you don't need to stop this, you need to explore it. A great start to a great; well written story. I'm looking forward to Ch; 2

I've deleted exactly one comment. And it is the one under this story that included an email address, which I gather you're not supposed to do.

If you look at my list of submissions, you'll see I've only been writing for a couple of months. And if you read some of them, I hope you'll see, as I do, that I'm learning.

One of the things I think I've learned is that I should use a standard note at the beginning of some of my stories.

"Warning: cum doesn't fly everywhere. Women don't simply lay back and welcome assaults. Penises and baseball bats are kept in separate rooms."

It is a shortcoming of mine :)

(And thank you, Anon! Glad you liked it. Stay tuned....)

B

Wow, what a great story and I am rock hard with anticipation. Please tell me they didn't stop. Please tell me that she felt more than just a quiver and that the warmth of his manhood filled her and her desire. Please tell me that his next orgasm coated her warm maternal womb and that she wanted more. Shybush

Amazing start to the first chapter. Great buildup for what's to come. I know it's going to be blazing HOT and a super turn-on!

Always nice to see your handle ;)

B

...but brevity can be alluring and I'm glad I read it. Few stories can work as stand alones or first chapters but this does, and with simple phrases said quite a bit. Keep writing, you will get there.

Fantastic stuff. The anticipation is almost killing me. My heart pounding in my chest. I wish my writing/stories caused this much heavy breathing

I just finished and submitted chapter 2. I want you to know the next chapter (which involves twin sisters) is a little bit more of a romance, but, bear with me. This story has several threads that will come together (!) in the end (?).

;)

B

That worked for me, looking forward to the next part. Keep up the good work.

The next part is just awaiting approval from The Powers That Be :)

B

Writer, you cant just stop in the middle of a story. Get your ass busy and finish it.

it looks like Chapter 2 went live while I was replying to Anonymous :)

B

I love reading her struggles, what she thought was "right" and what she wanted to do. It gave a wonderful insight to how one makes such a decision, and it was all quite arousing. Thank you.

Ok just getting into the incest thing..... i love both chapters but im yearning to read the continuation of ch.1. I have to say best writing iv read yet on this site kudos!

Chapter 3 should be up any day now. Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment :)

B

Wonderful story and love the struggle to restrain.. cant wait to read the next chapter

Chapter 4 just posted. There's at least one more to come :)

B

Jake ends up snuggling his young prick up where both he and his mother want it to go, his mother's warm cozy mommy-hole. It's obvious that both Jake and his mom know that that's where the boy's stiff prick belongs.

That was a fun read. Very fun feminine style.

delicious writing.

I just want to say that this was very touching and quite lovely, thank you for the read.

Nice story, good offhand narration. Many relationships have probably begun with this same kind of slightly risque dance.

Another chapter would be nice, they both

love each other so much, there has to be

more to this story.PLEASE find that last

chapter, or make it a short series.

...THANKS...

Paused the action at the right time.

The son appears to be a mature adult who knows what he wants and needs. He realizes the emotional, psychological and physical challanges his mother is going through. He senses her vulnerability, He wants to sexually please his mother while .unconsciously caring about her psychological sensitivity to their relationship. He wants to show her that they can sexually relate while not adversely affecting the solidity of their relationship. Feom the mother's point of view, she needs the safety, security and and love her son unconditionally offers her. She knows he wants to please her more than himself.