by demure101
i generally dread what goes around "heart", "love", here you do a fine job.
your distance
paints frost ferns
on the walls
this is what i talking about, the what of poetry, do more
5ed of course
I like the ambiguity you establish here..."hot" as in "I need to fan", and "hot" as in "sexually arousing"; "awake" as in "not asleep" and "awake" as in "ready for sexual action". He's one definition, she's another. Opposing ideas of what love is are built brilliantly here, and the irony of "distance" is emphasized, because s/he's close by in
body, but far away in spirit.
do people live, love and feel differently, TK U MLJ LV NV
With 1201 - this is very good. I like the contrasting words and the overall sense of distance and loneliness. The final line is particularly strong. The title is also interesting and adds an aural dimension of sadness to the poem. I guess it's a service to tell the readers where Negombo is, but I'd have just left it unsaid in hopes that real readers would google it -- it never hurts to get people to think and maybe learn something new. You are probably just a nicer person than I am (smile). Well done.
...yes, we do. Not in the sense of being human -- in that regard, we are all the same under the skin -- but in the sense of being considered/lableled/treated as lesser, as lacking those essentials that make life meaningful. Our existence shows that First World perceptions of reality, of truth, are flawed at best, aside from being prejudiced. But love is powerful, wherever it lives, and life is precious, however it is lived.
I MEANT NO DISRESPECT TO EITHER THE COUNTRY OR THE PEOPLE, THE POLITICALLY CORRECT TERMS, I USE THEM TO MAKE A STATEMENT. I HAVE BEEN IN SEVERAL COUNTRIES, MEXICO, PHILLIPINES, PORT LYAUTEY F.W. MORROCO which isnt even there now. ENGLAND, FRANCE, GERMANY, SCOTLAND, KOREA, CHINA, THE CARIBBEAN, SPAIN, ITALY etc I HAVE OBSERVED YOUNG AND OLD ALIKE, IN LOVE i hope and the way they court and in being together. SOME ARE MORE OPEN THAN OTHERS BUT DEFINITELY, LOVE WAS IN THE AIR. tk u mlj lv nv
I can't much to the prior comments, except Dawn J's were particularly astute, and the poem's diction was captivating.