All Comments on 'Morning After Ch. 01'

There may be a good story in there, but it needs some serious editing assistance.

Yes, some editing will improve things--when isn't that true?--but I like the beginnings of character illumination and development. This first installment seemed to end pretty abruptly. It was a good line to end on, but there needed to be more, both within the main character and between her and this guy. I wouldn't say I'm hooked, but I am definitely curious to see where this leads next.

Enjoyed it, Build up your characters and story carefully. Look forward to next part